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Oxfam/Woolworths

by  Tigger23  ( 1616 )

Posted: 11 July 2009
Word Count: 262


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Oxfam

Yesterday, a middle aged woman bought her Wedding Dress in.
She said she no longer wished to be reminded of her worst mistake.
A young couple bought it for £60.
They liked the colour, and had a baby on the way.

Last week, a mother bought in a box of toys.
She said they just collected dust since the accident.
An old couple bought them for the grand-children
they don’t see since the divorce.

A man with arthritis bought a worn out old pair of trainers.
He said he would not go running anymore,
but they were like a pair he wore,
when he ran three marathons in two months.

A crew of youths buy some old records.
They say they are cool and retro,
but their parents bought them
the first time around.

A love-struck young man buys a collected work of poetry,
and aims to woo the girl of his dreams with Byron’s words,
The inscriptions say such words of beauty,
He falls in love for a second time that day.

Woolworths

An old woman with beady eyes,
Complains that there is nothing worth anything
in the sale today.
20,000 people lost their jobs.

A man wonders where he will buy
his monthly middle of the road CD.
20,000 people lost their jobs.

A young mother tries telling her brood of three,
that there will be no pick and mix.
20,000 people lost their jobs.

At Christmas, people will want to celebrate,
and festoon their homes with tinsel,
and maybe then they will remember
20,000 people lost their jobs.




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Posted by :  LMJT at 22:27 on 11 July 2009
Hi Ben,

I really like this. I like the tongue in cheek humour in the first part of the poem and the repeated line of the second. However, for me it is two different and seperate poems.

I don't read a lot of poetry, but was intrigued by your title, so of course feel free to ignore what I say.

The only criticism I would make in terms of the writing is that you switch from past to present tense in the first section (is that the right word?) of the poem:

A man with arthritis bought a worn out old pair of trainers.


A crew of youths buy some old records.


That jarred with me a little.

Anyway, thanks for the read.

Liam


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