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A couple more.....

by nickb

Posted: 21 May 2010
Word Count: 23

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Recalled fond smile,
glimpsed truth of teeth and lips.
A dragonfly flickers.

Moon-laced shadows
spill oak on a hoar hedge.
A hunter calls.

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V`yonne at 14:08 on 22 May 2010 Report this post

I feel really out of my depth here but I'll jump in anyway and Alan will do the rescue and resussitation ;

I didn't really get an image from the first one. It seemed like the last line had nothing to do with the first 2 but I may be just missing some esoteric meaning of dragonfly or something...

I liked the second only I thought you could use
hunter's moon as the last line somehow and
laced oak
shadows on hoar hedge...

Now Alan will suggest something completely brilliant and I'll go dust down my free verse and freud

Read the WriteWords interview with Oonah Joslin (V`yonne)

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