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The Teddy Scare: Revision 5 and 6

by  The Bar Stward

Posted: Sunday, December 13, 2009
Word Count: 1644
Summary: Hello I'm giving serious thought to submitting this and I have just finished some artwork for it (http://farm3.static.flickr.com/2491/4183230652_ba7c8d1e16.jpg)




THE TEDDY SCARE

Version 6



Once there was a little girl called Aimee, who had a scruffy old bear whom she loved very much. His name was Patch and he had been with her forever, and though his stitching was loose, and his fluff kept on falling out, it did not stop the two of them having lots of magical fun together around Aimees home.


To Aimee and Patch the washing room wasn't just a place full of dirty washing, oh no, to them it was a humongous mountain to be conquered.


And a cardboard box wasn't just something the new television came in, to Aimee and Patch is was an interstellar spaceship, which took them both on incredible journeys through our Solar System, to visit all of the planets, and to visit some of the people who lived there.


Best of all, the garden was not just some over grown grass at the back of the house, it was a magnificent jungle waiting to be explored, full of strange creatures that only Aimee and her tatty old bear knew about.


(Note: In the last picture you see Patch getting muddy and his stitching falling out, which leaves a trail of his fluff behind him)


However there was one place that Aimee and Patch never dared ventured. Under the stairs was a mysterious black, gloomy door and whenever the pair felt brave enough to try and open that door a huge roar from within would scare them away. Aimee often wondered what horrible thing lived under the stairs.


One afternoon, when Aimee had eaten her lunch, she raced up to her bedroom to get Patch so that he could join her on another new adventure, but to her shock and horror he wasn’t on the bed where she had left him, in fact he was nowhere to be found at all!


Had Patch gone exploring without her? Where could he be?


Aimee looked all over her bedroom for Patch but she could not find him anywhere. Finally Aimee noticed a piece of white fluff besides her bed, just by where Patch had last been. Then Aimee spotted another piece, and another. There was a trail on the floor, and she followed the pieces of fluff out of her room...


OH NO! The trail led to the scary black door under the stairs, and inside Aimee could hear a terrible grumble!


There is a monster under the stairs , Aimee thought and he must have taken my teddy bear!


Aimee felt scared and she almost ran away to hide under her duvet, but then she remembered poor ol'Patch. Would he leave me if I was in trouble , Aimee thought no he would not!


Aimee suddenly had the most brillant plan.


Aimee snuck into the washing room and found her Daddy’s pile of horrible work socks. They were the most terrible, smelliest, old socks in the whole wide world. Holding her breath she grabbed as many of the stinkers as she could carry. She raced back to her room and there she made a surprise for the nasty, teddy stealing monster.


(The sections where Aimee thinks to herself could perhaps been in speech bubbles within the illustrations)


If a monster is going to be pinching my teddy , Aimee thought to herself, let’s see how he likes this! At the end of her bed she made the whiffiest, smelliest, pongiest teddy there have ever been.


(Illustration will show how Aimee puts the socks together, relucantly as the smell is so bad)


Aimee had turned her Daddy’s dreadful socks into a teddy bear.


That night Aimee waiting in her bed for the monster to come and rob her trick teddy and when he did, the terrible smell would make him faint and then she could go and rescue poor Patch from the dreaded monsters lair under the stairs.


Aimee waited, and waited, and waited until, her little eyes could stay open no longer and she fell into a deep sleep.


There was a noise and Aimee very quickly woke up, the stinky sock teddy was gone, but its smell was not. Her bedroom door was wide open and from down stairs she could hear very loud grumbles from beneath the stairs.


Aimee leapt from her bed and raced down the stairs and quickly found herself outside the monsters lair. The door was slightly open and after taking a deep breath Aimee took a peak inside.


It was very dark and hard to see but she could just make out the shadow of the monster. He was bigger than she had imagined and he was grumbling louder than ever. It seemed he was sick, very sick. Aimee could see he had the sock teddy inside his mouth and it was going around and around. Her plan had worked.


Then Aimee saw what she had come for...Patch. Her old bear was sat right next to the monster, who was still grumbling very loud indeed. Without hesitation Aimee darted into the room, grabbed her bear and ran back out, slamming the door shut behind her!


When Aimee was back in her bed she checked to see if Patch was okay and he was, in fact he was perfect. Patch had brand new stitching and a new patch on his belly to stop his fluff falling out. He was also very clean.


The monster must have liked Patch a lot, but never again did he try to steal him. The monster was now too afraid of Aimee.


(Note: The illustrations would subtley show in the background that it was Aimee's mother who took and cleaned/fixed Patch.)

THE TEDDY SCARE

Previous Version 5


Once there was a little girl called Aimee, who had a scruffy old bear whom she loved very much. His name was Patch and he had been with her forever, but he was quite old so Aimee's Mommy always had to stitch him back together.

Every day Aimee and Patch would have the most wonderful adventures; their imagination could turn even the most boring thing into something magically fantastic. Of course that is why it is so brilliant being a little person like you.

To Aimee and Patch the washing room wasn't just a place full of dirty washing, oh no, to them it was a humongous mountain to be conquered.

And a cardboard box wasn't just something the new television came in, to Aimee and Patch is was an interstellar spaceship, which took them both on incredible journeys through our Solar System, to visit all of the planets, and to visit some of the people who lived there.

Best of all, the garden was not just some over grown grass at the back of the house, it was in fact a magnificent jungle waiting to be explored, full of strange creatures that only Aimee and her tatty old bear knew about.

(Note: In the last picture you see Patch getting muddy and a bit torn)

One afternoon, when Aimee had just eaten all of her lunch, she raced up to her bedroom to get Patch so that he could join her on another new adventure, but to her shock and horror he wasn’t on the bed where she had left him, in fact he was nowhere to be found at all!


Had Patch gone exploring without her? No he wouldn’t do that because it just isn't as fun unless you do it together.

Aimee suddenly noticed a piece of white fluff on the floor, and then another piece, and another. There was a trail which wasn’t on her floor before she had eaten her lunch, and so she followed the pieces of fluff out of her room, along the landing, down the stairs and OH NO! The trail led to the scary black door under the stairs, and inside Aimee could hear a terrible grumble!


There is a monster under the stairs,’ Aimee thought ‘and he must have taken my teddy bear!’


Was Aimee scared? Yes she certainly was and she almost ran away to hide under her duvet, but then she remembered poor ol'Patch. Would he leave her if she was in trouble, no he would not!


Aimee decided she was going to rescue her fluffy friend and teach that horrible monster a lesson while doing so, and she had the most brilliant plan.

Aimee snuck into the washing room and found her Daddy’s pile of foul socks. They were the most terrible, smelliest, old socks in the whole wide world, but Aimee needed them for her super idea and so managed to hold her nose and take as many as she could carry. She raced back to her room and there she made a surprise for the nasty, teddy stealing monster.


'If a monster is going to be pinching my teddy', Aimee thought to herself, 'let’s see how he likes this', and at the end of her bed she put the whiffiest, smelliest, pongiest teddy there have ever been. Aimee had turned her Daddy’s dreadful socks into a teddy bear.


That night Aimee waiting in her bed for the monster to come and rob her trick teddy and when he did, the terrible smell would make him faint and then she could go and rescue poor Patch.

Aimee waited, and waited, and waited until, oh no, she fell asleep. However, when Aimee woke up, the stinky sock teddy was gone, but in its place was now Patch. He looked very clean and he was nicely stitched back together.


Horray, Aimee shouted, my teddy is back. Obviously the monster didn’t like Aimee’s stinky surprise at all and didn’t want any more.


(Note: The illustrations would subtley show in the background that it was Aimee's mother who took and cleaned/fixed Patch.)