Wolf Hut - latest draft
by 
andinadia
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Posted: Thursday, April 9, 2015 Word Count: 349 Summary: This is still a work in progress. I hope you don't mind watching it emerge like this. Anyway the group has been a bit quiet the past few days. I think the story is losing its Pinteresqueness (probably not a bad thing!). What I'm not sure of is whether it's a potentially engaging pb narrative. |
Spread 1
Little Wolf was locking the door of the hut when he heard a sneeze.
It was raining hard outside. Little Wolf slid the door open and let the customer in.
(a/w: It’s dusk, midwinter, raining outside. Little Wolf is a child-sized wolf standing inside the door of the café. We can see a large blurred shape through the glass of the door. Behind the shape we can make out a park in the fading light.)
Spread 2
The customer took off his hat and shook his ears.
Big Wolf looked hard at the customer.
“Tea?” Big Wolf asked.
“Yes,” the customer said quietly.
Big Wolf narrowed his eyes.
“Please,” the customer said, and he sat down at the table in the corner.
Little Wolf and Big Wolf looked at each other.
(a/w: A large pig in an undersized greatcoat and pin striped trousers enters the cafe. We can see the ends of his pin-striped jacket poking from the ends of his coat sleeves. Big Wolf is standing behind the counter. Maybe also a close up of Big Wolf’s narrowed eyes?)
Spread 3
“I thought you might like some cake too,” Big Wolf said. He brought a mug of tea and a large slice of Victoria Sponge.
“Thank you,” the customer said.
The customer sipped some of his tea. He took a pen from his jacket and started doodling on a napkin.
Little Wolf wanted to see what the doodle was. It was a house.
(a/w: xxx)
Spread 4
The customer ate some of the cake. He closed his eyes, licked his lips with his big pink tongue, then opened his eyes again.
“This is lovely cake,” he said and smiled at Little Wolf.
Little Wolf saw shiny teardrops in the corners of the customer’s little round eyes.
(a/w: xxx)
Spread 5
“You are very kind,” the customer said, and a teardrop fell from his long pink snout.
Little Wolf did not know what to say.
“Are you from around here?” Big Wolf asked the customer.
“Not really,” the customer said. “I don’t have a home. I lost it.”
Little Wolf was locking the door of the hut when he heard a sneeze.
It was raining hard outside. Little Wolf slid the door open and let the customer in.
(a/w: It’s dusk, midwinter, raining outside. Little Wolf is a child-sized wolf standing inside the door of the café. We can see a large blurred shape through the glass of the door. Behind the shape we can make out a park in the fading light.)
Spread 2
The customer took off his hat and shook his ears.
Big Wolf looked hard at the customer.
“Tea?” Big Wolf asked.
“Yes,” the customer said quietly.
Big Wolf narrowed his eyes.
“Please,” the customer said, and he sat down at the table in the corner.
Little Wolf and Big Wolf looked at each other.
(a/w: A large pig in an undersized greatcoat and pin striped trousers enters the cafe. We can see the ends of his pin-striped jacket poking from the ends of his coat sleeves. Big Wolf is standing behind the counter. Maybe also a close up of Big Wolf’s narrowed eyes?)
Spread 3
“I thought you might like some cake too,” Big Wolf said. He brought a mug of tea and a large slice of Victoria Sponge.
“Thank you,” the customer said.
The customer sipped some of his tea. He took a pen from his jacket and started doodling on a napkin.
Little Wolf wanted to see what the doodle was. It was a house.
(a/w: xxx)
Spread 4
The customer ate some of the cake. He closed his eyes, licked his lips with his big pink tongue, then opened his eyes again.
“This is lovely cake,” he said and smiled at Little Wolf.
Little Wolf saw shiny teardrops in the corners of the customer’s little round eyes.
(a/w: xxx)
Spread 5
“You are very kind,” the customer said, and a teardrop fell from his long pink snout.
Little Wolf did not know what to say.
“Are you from around here?” Big Wolf asked the customer.
“Not really,” the customer said. “I don’t have a home. I lost it.”