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Chimerical (revised-version II)

by  laurafraser

Posted: Monday, February 7, 2005
Word Count: 292
Summary: As advised by miffle/nikki had a little play around this morning and would be interested to see what people think of two... still needs work-feel second version is stronger in first half but loosses that strength in last third? xlaura 'samadhic bliss' refers to a meditative state known as 'samadhi' this is achieved when (at last!) one manages to silence the constant chattering of the mind and exist in a realm of consciousness that is indeed 'blissful.'




Version I:

Howling sounds from the bracken strangled moors,
Scratch at my ears; their screaming agony
Of the vipers and the mambas, the harlots and the gremlins
Who made beauty fade away,
Is the agony that wails in the belly, tearing diseased organs to shreds
Like chunks of skin dropping from the bones
As little dew drops of poison, slink slowly towards the heart
Which just a moment ago was iridescent with rainbows and summer larks,
Bubble baths and soft pillows.
And yet chimerical are these sensations emotions:
Calmness and stillness evaporate, pass away
So suddenly, as if abandoning one
to flounder and flap in the destitute of terror -
Medusa’s snakes licking our gangrene feet
As the leeches arrive to reclaim their blood
That splatters in phlegmy puddles by those feetless fellows.
So like a lone leaf blowing down a people-less street,
Where only the rats run down
Past this ancient town,
Be in a hurry to find somewhere else.

Version II:

Howling sounds from the bracken-strangled moors,
Scratch my ears,
As the vipers and the mambas, the harlots and the gremlins
Make beauty fade away.
So now this must unfurl:
Diseased organs dissolve in my acrid bile,
Chunks of skin drop from their bones as
Dew-drops of poison slink slowly towards my heart,
That before this moment was iridescent
With the rivers’ sparkle, and samadhic bliss.
Chimerical are sensations, emotions -
Sublime stillness evaporates, passes away
So suddenly.
Medusa’s snakes licking our gangrene feet
The leeches lurching sagaciously towards skin, aroused by the blood
Coagulating in phlegmy puddles by those feetless fellows.
So like a lone leaf blowing down a people-less street,
Where only the rats run down
Past this ancient town,
Be in a hurry to find somewhere else.