Login   Sign Up 



 
Archive » John G.Hall » Work
Archive »  Poetry » General » Work

Surprise

by John G.Hall 

Posted: 31 July 2005
Word Count: 70
Summary: one haiku deserves another
Related Works: Couples • 
Font Size
 


Printable Version
Print Double spaced


Surprise

walking an old road
my feet make familiar trips
the joke is on me,

in a rivers bend
a salmon treads the water
then swims for heaven,

in a clouds country
a swallow blows from Africa
in love with the cold,

opening my front door
my pet satan breaks free
then offers me bones,

ancient and modern
my hymns are always hers,
yet only you surprise me.


John G.Hall(C)2005






Favourite this work Favourite This Author


Comments by other Members



Account Closed at 08:42 on 03 August 2005  Report this post
Enjoyed these, though wasn't quite sure how they were all related. Might some of them be stand-alone haikus? I would also take out the punctuation and let them breathe - ie you don't need the end commas, and I'm not even sure about the final full-stop. How do you feel about them if they have no punctuation at all? That might work for me!

LoL

A
xxx
Helpful (0) Made Me Think (0) Made Me Smile (0) Pure Genius (0)


To post comments you need to become a member. If you are already a member, please log in .

 






Other work by John G.Hall:      ...view all work by John G.Hall