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Heartfelt Fear

by Rai15 

Posted: 16 September 2005
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How can sweet ecstasy
make you feel so dead?
I know you can hear me
but I’ve never spoken before
I have felt your warmth
but never known your skin
I want to take your pain away
but I cannot face my fears
I want to hold you and make it better
but I cannot find the strength
I want to tell you this
because I want you.






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paul53 [for I am he] at 12:34 on 20 September 2005  Report this post
From a personal note, I would love this piece twice as much if it ended on the "because . . ." - leaving an air of mystery and letting the reader to fill in the blanks.
I cannot believe this has gone without a comment so far. I know this site has "dead" times and busy members are irregularly popping in and out - well, I choose to believe that rather than the "I'll comment on yours if you comment on mine" syndrome. For regular comments, best get in a group. You might still get a few uploads ignored by some [I certainly do], but at least the group host will be polite and forthcoming.
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