The Most Beautiful Butterfly by kathimarksmerr

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The Most Beautiful Butterfly

by kathimarksmerr

Posted: 29 November 2005
Word Count: 87
Summary: A children's short story about children and nature

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It was a beautiful spring days my friends and I decided to talk a walk. We noticed a butterfly flying byand other followed. We saw a lake where we decided to stop and eat lunch. After lunch we continued on our journey. A large group of butterflies passed by us, we all wanted to catch them, they were passed by so quickly. We decided to leave the butterflies to fly and enjoy nature. Butterflies are to be free. This is a brief synopsis of my short story.

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old friend at 06:17 on 30 November 2005 Report this post

Kathi,

A nice idea. Whatever you write always read it through carefully to pick up the typos and mistakes that we all make.

In your few short lines I was 'stopped' by 'days' (this should be singular after that word you need a full point or a semi-colon) and at the end of that line there is a need for a space also I think you meant to type 'another'.

Nevertheless it is a pleasant thought for a children's story.

Len

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