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Together I`m Leaving

by hailfabio 

Posted: 19 January 2006
Word Count: 19
Summary: Two to ponder.
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Together

Taking sips
from my soul
leaves me whole

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Leaving

Taking sips
from my soul
leaves a hole






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joanie at 12:02 on 19 January 2006  Report this post
Hi Stephen. Mmm... they certainly do make you ponder! Interesting.

joanie
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Account Closed at 16:05 on 20 January 2006  Report this post
Ooh lovely. Mirror haikus - great! And very gripping indeed.

Wouldn't change a thing!

:))

A
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tinyclanger at 18:32 on 21 January 2006  Report this post
Great, very clever. I didn't know there was such a thing as 'mirror Haiku', so thanks for introducing me to them. Smashing sense of balance between the two.
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hailfabio at 18:51 on 21 January 2006  Report this post
I didn't know either :s haha.

Have I invented it?

Thanks for the kind comments.

Stephen
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