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the Quest - 1

by bluesky3d 

Posted: 13 August 2003
Word Count: 699
Summary: this has been divided into four, of which this is the first part of the fantasy - all four parts have now been loaded up .. you can find them by following the link in comments or from my profile page or by clicking on the links in the Forum page


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the first letter

Over the field and over the stile (illustration fig 1)

We set off on our country ramble - our first steps ... on this short trip or long hike - who knows… Thank you for joining me on our journey. The sun is shining, and there are bits of cloud, like strips of torn white paper thinly scattered over a sea of blueness. The green downs beckon from the wide yonder as if they are expecting us. On this morning of the last day of April, the air is sweet and fresh. We are minded of our promise to give ourselves a present, sharing some thoughts with each other.

The countryside is sometimes rambling, sometimes intimate, sometimes it makes associations en route, a touch discreet here, hidden secrets revealed there. The roads and paths on our journey twist and turn amongst the hills and valleys. Sometimes you might think you have lost your way, but that familiar intricate landscape still envelops, and caresses. This is a treasure hunt, but in search of what? In search of a word, a word that carries many meanings but carries one meaning deeper than all others.

We pass the rambling house. Its honey mellow bricks and pantile roof are welcoming. We see ‘October Hall’, in faded gold paint on a sign above the wrought iron gate. Perhaps we will return here at the end of our quest, if we survive our journey? The woods are deep. There are oaks and ash, rowan and birch. It is ancient woodland. The Celts once walked this land too. Those who can see by feeling, may yet sense their presence.

Thickets of brambles poke from the new green bracken ferns. The ground is sandy underfoot. Life is everywhere reawakening. Bluebells crowd the dappled sunpools, like ballet dancers under spotlights.

After walking through this landscape we find a stream, and follow its course down through the wood.

Eventually, after walking for some time, following the verdant banks as close as we may, we come to a clearing. The stream widens at this point. A strange red sandstone outcrop forms an island, and marks this as a special place. The stone is long and broadens out downstream and returns toward the far bank, suggesting a letter.

It is now mid afternoon. The light has turned a warmer hue. We decide that this will be our first point of call. A camp is made, our first camp on the journey. We choose a spot a little away from the clearing, behind a ridge, from where we can look down upon the scene, as it feels too special a place to intrude.

We make beds from the bracken. Tonight we will lie there to look up at the stars and wonder. What is our quest? How will we know when we find the answers we seek?

For now, we busy ourselves with our campfire and preparing our first meal. A vegetable broth, made from clear spring water. Before our journey, we each prepared a selection of foods. We have brought with us fruits and dried vegetables. And how the smell from the small pot now refreshes our souls! The meal brings us laughter, and we talk animatedly of the journey ahead.

We pass the time telling of childhood friends we once had; relating adventures half forgotten, but now once more brought to mind.

How dark it is. But now the friendly moon melts through the budding branches and bathes the clearing below in its yellow light. We think we hear the sounds of the crushing of bracken and look down expectantly, do we fall within a dream...

A diaphanous cloud veils the moon
that singing blind man is the wind
the air is fresh with whispering
the living dead are listening
The virgin huntress hides her head
And is led down paths to steep to stop...

We awake in the clearing. The early morning sun cascades around us in a waterfall of light. We rise from our bracken beds with one thought shared between us - if poetry is making love with words, did we trespass too close to the edge under the influence of the stars...






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roger at 09:27 on 13 August 2003  Report this post
Hi Andrew,

Lovely writing...simple but so descriptive, conjuring up image after image. Then 'If we survive the journey' leapt out at me to make me wonder where this was leading - a few days camp taking us somewhere sinister? And then, at the end, that thought is reawakened by the poem. And your last line brought a shiver. Is this something to read with a torch under the bed-clothes?

Nice...better than nice.

Ralph at 09:57 on 13 August 2003  Report this post
Andrew
Thank you for this. However much I've missed these landscapes you brought them all back so clearly for me that I felt at home in your writing somehow - truly beautiful.
Some really interesting ideas - to open each of the first 3 paragraphs with the word ramble/rambling, so that first we are walking, then the countryside is, and then it's the buildings almost joining in... and all the time there is a sense of Celtic past shadowing the journey. I'm really looking forward to reading more of this....
Fantastic stuff.
Huggs
Ralph

P.S - have downloaded your Icera chapters to read this upcoming weekend. Have to go to the inlaws (eek!) so thanks in advance for the escape route.... :D

JohnK at 10:13 on 13 August 2003  Report this post
Andrew -
We know the season, and the date, but not the century or the place. The quest is for a word, that is to me the best clue. Pleasantly obscure.

Four parts, or 'letters', this this one could be Spring, with the other seasons following.

Looking forwrds to reading more,
Regards, JohnK.

stephanieE at 10:26 on 13 August 2003  Report this post
Andrew, delicately written, touching the joys of nature lightly, reverently almost... Really evocative description and a tantalising glimpse of where this might go - lovely.

At the risk of being predictable, can I suggest a couple of small typos?

a touch discrete - do you mean discrete (separate) or discreet (circumspect)?

the landscape evelopes - I think that the verb is envelops, and the paper things are envelopes.

And I would add a question mark to the final sentence...

Looking forward to more

Sarah at 11:03 on 13 August 2003  Report this post
... under the influence of stars... that's so lovely. I had to read this very slowly, so that I wouldn't miss all you were trying to say. What I love about this is the celebration of what's simple. Sleeping on bracken, food made with spring water, stories as entertainment. And then poetry as making love with words... I associated that with the stories they telling eachother...
This also has the right amount of suspence. This section almost feels like the calm before some storm.

What interests me about the English countryside is its anthropomorphism, or really, the tendency of English writers towards anthropomorphism when they're writing about it. There is so much history on this land; not an inch of it is left unwalked, and the whole place is haunted (I don't mean that in a ghoulish way. I mean, all of it has personality, and some metaphysical connection to humanity). I hope I'm not offending anyone with this observation, because I do mean it in a good way. You've really captured this with this piece.

Ellenna at 11:49 on 13 August 2003  Report this post
What a beautiful pilgrimage..a lovely sense of calm intent..

Lovely A...:)

Ellie..



bluesky3d at 12:15 on 13 August 2003  Report this post
Thanks to all above…
Roger..
this isn’t going to be a supernatural, not quite in the sense you might be anticipating. Thanks for your ‘better than nice’, I am chuffed by that. Great you enjoyed it.

Ralph..
If the Icera Stone achieves no more magic than making the visit to you in-laws something to look forward to, then I won’t mind is it is never published.

Hope the Quest didn’t make you feel too homesick. Huggs back

John..
Yes, the timelessness was deliberate, the answer however is intentionally not as cryptically encoded as the Icera Stone. There are illustrations to accompany this and it is a pity we haven’t got a way of posting those up too, but I will think about it, perhaps I could make a web site for this - it is probably easier than trying to find a publisher.

Stephanie..
I went through minimising those feminine rhetoricals and I did my best to eliminate all but one male impertinency, and now you want me to put one question mark back.. yipeee! I must be making progress.

Thanks for the corrections … spot on! .. they were more like ‘no-braino’s’ than ‘typo’s’ on my part… much appreciated.

Sarah..
Perhaps there wont be a storm? There may look like one coming, but those clouds may just blow the other way. That is the thing about the English weather.. it used to be so damn unpredictable. You have picked up exactly the feelings towards the countryside I wanted to convey... thanks

Ellie..
a pilgrimage and a homage too, again thanks.

Andrew


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Ralph .. I meant to type... 'I won't mind, if it is never published'

Sarah at 13:25 on 13 August 2003  Report this post
Oh.. I hope you didn'take 'storm' literally! I probably shouldn't have used that saying... I meant it quite metaphorically, like something big is going to happen.


And this being electronic communication, perhaps your reply to me was metaphorical too!!

Anyway, I'm glad I interpreted your message correctly; hope that makes you feel like you've accomplished something, because you have.

bluesky3d at 13:40 on 13 August 2003  Report this post
Sarah, to quietly revel in understated metaphor is perhaps one characteristic of Englishness… it may be something to do with the nature of our repressed upbringing, though I suspect the reason lies deeper.

Sarah at 13:51 on 13 August 2003  Report this post
Ahhhh... the literary way of admitting that the English are bloody sarcastic!! ;) I've slowly grown accustomed to it, thankfully!

Sarah at 14:23 on 13 August 2003  Report this post
So indeed, the tendancy runs very, very deep. An age-old pasttime, perfected after many years' practice.

bluesky3d at 14:52 on 13 August 2003  Report this post
Sarah, the problem is that 'taking the mick' as you imply, taken to the extreme means our views become influenced by the crass and cynical... and results in the situation where all drama on tv, stage or screen is about death, murder, crime, incest, violence or catastrophe, and where humour is about poking fun. (I will refrain from siting examples but there are many) The intention here was to try and rediscover the flip side.

So should we start a campaign to help push the pendulum swing away from the cynical and towards the metaphorical? ...maybe its a fashion thing?

Whatever happened to the sixties generation of peace and love?

That is why I appreciated the latter day hippyness of Art in Terry Edge's Field.

(returning your plug Terry)

Andrew :o)

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apologies Nell.. yes and an affinity with your Ellie in the Golden Web, of course.

Nell at 15:39 on 13 August 2003  Report this post
Andrew, you've expressed my feelings for the countryside so well - that sense of unseen history, myth and magic - and like Ellie in The Golden Web
they've found a letter - what are they seeking I wonder?

This seems quite different from The Icera Stone in spite of the overlap in content - looking forward to more.

Best, Nell.

bluesky3d at 16:34 on 13 August 2003  Report this post
Thank you Nell …Yes bracken beds and Beltane again, sorry hehe.. the style's a little different but maybe the ethos is still the same - an illusive sense of the magical and metaphorical found within landscape and captured within in artefacts. Better not build it up too much though, in case everyone thinks the next three episodes dont live up to the billing.

Andrew :o)

Becca at 21:03 on 13 August 2003  Report this post
Andrew, I wanted to hang back when we passed October Hall, it seemed familiar to me, like some forgotten dream, but you called me on. I'm following you.

bluesky3d at 21:14 on 13 August 2003  Report this post
Pleased not to lose you quite yet Becca.. hope you make it to the end of the Quest.
A :o)

Sarah at 11:35 on 14 August 2003  Report this post
Prior... I just went with it, thought it was another thing I knew nothing about.

And no!! I think we sould keep things the way they are, because partnered with this cynicism is a great talent for being able to laugh at oneself -- something the Brits are far and away the masters of. You know it, the rest of the world knows it, and in these times of complete global chaos... I say, bring it on!


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