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where`s my princess

by o11ie

Posted: 26 July 2006
Word Count: 112
Summary: my desparte cry for the unachievable

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Where is my princess

Where is my princess?
My exciting mistress
A girl to chase
Who holds my pace

Where is my lover?
My soothing mother
A beautiful sight
Who holds me tight

Where is my whore?
My obedient slave
A girl to hurt
Who doesn’t complain

Where is my Juliet?
My yearning heart
A fatal love
Who tears me apart

Where is my friend?
On whom I can depend
A girl to adore
Who’s never a chore

Who is this girl who lives in my head?
A dream, a fantasy, or something I read?
When will I appreciate what I’ve got
And let in the one who sleeps in my bed?

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joanie at 20:01 on 27 July 2006 Report this post

Hi o11ie. Welcome to WW! At first, this makes me think of a daddy - "My Princess", although very quickly I realise that this is very different!

You convey very well the idea that a woman has to be everything to everybody, whatever the requirement at the time.

I love form and rhyme, but I would advise you not to be too bound by it; the best parts of this have started to move away from the restrictions.

The sentiments behind this are excellent, as expressed in the closing lines.

Well done.

joanie

<Added>

Meant to say that you need to decide whether you want a capital at the atart of each line; I prefer doing it as it would be in prose. Your choice!

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o11ie at 22:13 on 29 July 2006 Report this post

thanks for your comments joanne. I've just been reading some of your stuff. I really enjoyed marrige of inconvieniece :)

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joanie at 00:11 on 30 July 2006 Report this post

Thanks, o11ie!

joanie

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