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Billy Darwin

by lrera 

Posted: 11 July 2007
Word Count: 284
Summary: Hello everyone. Here is my entry for week 68.


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“Take your hands off me!”

“Sir, you can’t do this in public.”

“Why not? Do ya see those guys over there playing soccer? What about them?”

He could see this was going to be more difficult than he’d imagined. After all it wasn’t exactly illegal...just sort of...weird. If he did arrest this young man, it would most likely make the papers–even the TV news.

Everybody’s always trying to grab their fifteen minutes of fame. Now it’s YouTube. You can be the most downloaded twit in a few days. The sergeant needed to deal with this, people were gathering, and young ones too. How will their parents explain what he’s doing?

“Sir, It’s been a blistering day. For those boys to remove their shirts while playing a sport is publicly acceptable.”

The little girl holding her mother’s hand, was giggling. A couple of rancid teens standing in the back, started to hoot and yell, calling the man on the park bench, a twinkie and a bleedin’ freak.

“OK sir, you leave me no other...”

“Just one minute, I’ve been sittin’ here takin’ care of my baby for an hour! What kind of parent would I be if I let my little one go hungry? Tell me that! People get arrested every day for abusing their children and now ya want to arrest me for doing the exact opposite?"

“But sir.”

“But my ass. I’m almost finished and I am going to stay put until I am.”

The sergeant called the station to ask for back-up. He knew the crowd would get into this one.

“Sir, first, you are nursing a plastic baby and second, men’s nipples are completely useless. You’ll need to come with me.”






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Jordan789 at 03:20 on 12 July 2007  Report this post
A bit of absurdity with a bit of social commentary. Good read. Perhaps adding a bit more to the initial dialogue would be nice. More scene descrips or something. But of course you cannot give away the prize.

lrera at 04:13 on 12 July 2007  Report this post
Jordan,
Thanks for reading and your suggestions...
Appreciate the feedback.

Best,
Lou

V`yonne at 10:02 on 12 July 2007  Report this post
LOU,
Thankyou for your Flash.

Well, those anachronistic nipples for men! Excellent idea!!

Exactly right for a flash - succinct and kept me guessing. Less is more in these cases and you were almost bang on the word count.

Everybody’s always trying to grab their fifteen minutes of fame. Now it’s YouTube. You can be the most downloaded twit in a few days.

I thought this bit was maybe too writer intrusive and unnecessary to the story BUT it's oh, so true.

a twinkie and a bleedin’ freak.

V Good!

We prefer arse to ass here. I know it's ruder but if you're talking about a man breast feeding a doll....what the hell!

Really enjoyed it. Oonah

lrera at 15:30 on 12 July 2007  Report this post
Hello Oonah,

Thank you for the review. I was amazed to find out how many human body parts are useless...(in some of us...maybe more!)

Glad to hear you enjoyed the piece.

Lou



Prospero at 16:32 on 12 July 2007  Report this post
Hi Lou

An interesting take on the the prompt. Nipples on men are certainly anachronistic and one wonders why they have survived? Maybe it is something to do with how far the body develops before it is determined for certain whether it will be male or female. But such things do tend to suggest that we haven't finished eveloving yet.

An enjoyable and thought provoking tale. Thanks for the read.

Best

Prosp

lrera at 17:00 on 12 July 2007  Report this post
Prosp,
You are dead on about the development of humans...it's a leftover once sex is determined. Thanks for reading.

Sincerely,
Lou



Forbes at 18:55 on 12 July 2007  Report this post
Made me laugh Irera. A good story about a mild nutter. Poor flatfoot who didn't know what to do.

“Sir, you can’t do this in public?”
Why a question?

TFR

Forbes

lrera at 21:48 on 12 July 2007  Report this post
Forbes,
Good point about the question. Thanks for reading and the catch.

Best wishes,
Lou


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