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The Devil Drink

by rmol1950 

Posted: 05 October 2007
Word Count: 229
Summary: Here is my entry for this weeks competition. The character comes out like an Irishman when I read it. I don't know why.


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‘An Archangel you say. Well, have a drop of this fine whiskey then, Mr Archangel. And which one might you be anyway? Which Archangel I mean? Lucifer you say? Well now isn’t this my lucky day. At least you won’t be giving me a hard time about the drink, now will you. Not like her. Sure the woman never gives over. Do this, do that, you’re always drunk, you’re useless, blah blah blah. It never stops. Never, ever stops. On and on and on. Jaysus. Will you look what she’s got me doing now. Painting a fuckin wall violet. Violet I ask you. What kind of colour is that? Look at the painty finger marks all over me nice bottle of whiskey and the drips on the carpet. Holy Mother o' God look at the state of the place and she’ll be back any time now. Bye the way, where’s your wings? Archangels should have wings, shouldn’t they. You don’t wear them up here? Now there’s a thing. Maybe she can take a needle and stitch you a new pair when she gets home. And then maybe you can frighten the b'Jaysus out of her and she’ll go away forever. Now there’s a fine idea. Are you sure you won’t have a drop of this? I love it. Always seem to meet new friends when I have a drink.’






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Prospero at 06:30 on 06 October 2007  Report this post
Hi Richard

A good stream of consciousness piece with a nice consistent voice. Good use of the title to set up the story . All in all a fine Flash. Weel done.

John

rmol1950 at 09:21 on 06 October 2007  Report this post
Prosp
Thank you, glad you liked it. It suddenly occurs to me that this is the first time my Catholic education has ever been of any value. At least I knew what an Archangel was.
Best wishes
Richard


Account Closed at 09:39 on 06 October 2007  Report this post
Great. Enjoyed this very much - the voice is wonderfully strong and somehow the very visual images all come across. Lovely!

A
xxx

ireneintheworld at 11:06 on 06 October 2007  Report this post
richard this is wonderful. i think you should continue with this character; it's so rich and colourful. made me laugh, i loved him, would love to read more of him and maybe even meet his lady wife.

irene

V`yonne at 11:10 on 06 October 2007  Report this post
Very funny. Loved that ending.

Well being Irish I'd go the whole hog on this and change the last

frighten the Jesus
to b'Jaysus

and maybe one further up to Holy Mother o' God.... because Irish blasphemy is quite colourful.

She never stops
to - Sure the woman never gives over. ??

It's a happy heaven where there's a bottle of Bushmills!!

Thank you :)

Oonah

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PS excellent tile too!

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I mean TITLE.

Slurred speech this time of the mornin'? It's the "Bush" I had for breakfast.

rmol1950 at 11:31 on 06 October 2007  Report this post
Thanks everybody for the kind comments and especially Oonah for the authentic dialogue suggetsions which I have now included.
Best wishes
Richard

FizzdeBrooke at 21:14 on 07 October 2007  Report this post
Yeah, well done Richard.


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