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Oyster
Posted: 25 November 2007
Word Count: 18
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all the world
ahead of you;
your oyster
hiding the pearl
of a life
yet to be lived.
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 V`yonne at 17:37 on 25 November 2007
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Joanie, this is lovely. It's not really about an oytser but about life. If I were you I'd call it, 'Seed' like in the seed of life and that is waht happens to an oyster, it gets seeded. Just a thohgt. Feel free to ignore. It really is beautiful.
Oonah
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oytser??? OYSTER I meant.
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Now you know why I'd call it Seed. Can't spell oytser!
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 DeepBlueGypsy at 17:56 on 26 November 2007
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joanie- the ability to make 18 words into poetry-wow! Well done! the oysters natural way of dealing with an irritant- encase it so that it no longer is bothersome, so from something that causes discomfort a precious "jem" is formed. Any words that can remind me of this is a true "jem". Thanks! Divi
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 joanie at 20:28 on 26 November 2007
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Mike and Divi - thank you very much for the encouragement! Glad you enjoyed it.
joanie
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 James Graham at 13:30 on 02 December 2007
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Joanie, I don’t want to make it sound dry, but this is a lesson in the art of metaphor. About a hundred years ago when I was an English teacher, I had my little stock of ‘good examples’ to show what a metaphor is. I could have added your oyster to my collection - it’s one for young people too, who collect so much grit under their shells, but in time may manage to produce pearls, even occasionally a ‘pearl of great price’. But I’m glad I don’t have to teach good examples of metaphor any more, but instead just enjoy your poem.
James.
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joanie at 21:14 on 02 December 2007
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James... 'dry' is excellent. An example of a metaphor suits me fine! Thank you so much.
joanie
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Tina at 08:02 on 14 December 2007
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Hi Joanie
Late to this
Loved it
Been away for a while - back now.
Tina
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