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Her baby

by rebecca 

Posted: 23 February 2008
Word Count: 34
Summary: For 'diagnosis' Flash too

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The white coats surrounded her. She could hear what they were saying but was distracted. Looking at his downy soft hair she just wanted to say "but look. Can't you see? He is perfect"

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tusker at 06:27 on 23 February 2008  Report this post
That was sad, Rebecca. A telling story written with the minimum of words.


rebecca at 06:39 on 23 February 2008  Report this post
Thanks Jennifer. Glad it's not just me up at the crack of dawn!

I was intending to write something else involving 'diagnosis murder' the tv programme but this came to me at about 5.30 this morning and I liked it more.


V`yonne at 12:04 on 23 February 2008  Report this post
Says everything it needs to say with such economy. Funny how stories come to you when you're lying there awake.
So poignant.

rosiedlm at 12:13 on 23 February 2008  Report this post
This implies so much; a mother's pain, the matter-of-factness of the professionals, the innocence of the baby.



Forbes at 16:03 on 23 February 2008  Report this post
Wonderful story. no need to say more.

excpet I loved it.




Just a thought - do you mean distracted, or not with them...detached, yes detached?

ireneintheworld at 00:08 on 24 February 2008  Report this post
it's amazing that you've got so much across in such a tiny piece. this is great rebecca. loved it.

irene x


just thought i'd mention the flash i've added, 'DIAGNOSIS' in case you don't notice it. something wrong with my computer and i can't use the reply button in the forum.

rebecca at 07:19 on 24 February 2008  Report this post
Aw, shucks. Thanks for the comments, glad it has been roundly enjoyed.

I did mean distracted, as in distracted from what the doctors were saying by her baby. Does that make sense.


Prospero at 12:51 on 25 February 2008  Report this post
Beautiful and poignant, Rebecca. Very well done.



pachelbel at 16:17 on 25 February 2008  Report this post
I thought that was superb. It says so much between the lines (to me). Excellent.

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