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The Blood Of Attis

by tusker 

Posted: 30 April 2008
Word Count: 358
Summary: Flash Fiction Challenge :Based very loosley on an ancient Celtic legend.


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Mad with jealousy, Cyblene rants while Attis, her only son, lies in the arms of a beautiful nymph, far more beautiful that his own mother. Cyblene, viewing from afar, paces the floor of her room and as she paces, she mutters dark incantations that swirl from her mouth like bile, souring the aroma of sweet herbs strewn beneath her feet.

Now her son's lovemaking, a stark scene in her mind's eye, causes those vile incantations to rise, bewailing Attis for his treachery and, his mother's vindictive spells snake from her mouth through the dense forest on a coil of revenge.

Suddenly, Attis pulls away from his lover. Leaping to his feet, with hands clamped over his ears, he flees from the beauty who's captured his heart, blundering through undergrowth, trying to find his way out. But, after many hours, weariness and despair overcomes him and he stumbles, collapsing against the sturdy trunk of an ancient May Tree.

Finally, exhausted by her fury, Cyblene sobs as, miles away, the May Tree weeps its white blossoms onto his prostrate from, rousing Attis with her sweet blooms that brush his cheeks like kisses.

Staggering to his feet, Attis pleads to the gods and Cyblene for forgiveness but, when no answer comes, he withdraws the sword that has slain many warriors and slices through his manhood.

Despite the distance between them, Cyblene, witnessing the terrible consequences of her jealousy, rushes from her home into woodland, frantically calling her son's name until, at last, she finds Attis lying dead at the base of the May Tree.

Falling to her kness, her long skirt drenched in his life's blood, she takes him in her arms and, as she weeps, rocking his body to and fro, pools of his blood mingle with the fertile earth beneath him, transforming his blood into clusters of deep blue violets.

At dusk, Cyblene carries Attis to his final resting place and the May Tree, watching from it's lofty height, begins to shed its lower branches in deep bereavement before bowing a thick cap of green foliage to the ground, adorning its leafy head in a fragrant crown of violets.






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V`yonne at 17:04 on 30 April 2008  Report this post
Great scene setting
mutters dark incantations that swirl from her mouth like bile, souring the aroma of sweet herbs strewn beneath her feet.

and nice imagery here
vindictive spells snake from her mouth through the dense forest on a coil of revenge.



They knew how to make an exit in those days!
Two picks:
prostrate from
to her kness


Does your son know about you? Hide all the sharp knives!

tusker at 17:15 on 30 April 2008  Report this post
Ha ha. Family think that I'm a bit weird but not that weird.

Jennifer

Forbes at 19:03 on 30 April 2008  Report this post
Wonderful stuff Jennifer!

Don't for heaven's sake let you son read this - you'll never see the grandchildren else!

Loved

....she mutters dark incantations that swirl from her mouth like bile, souring the aroma of sweet herbs strewn beneath her feet.


and

...the May Tree weeps its white blossoms onto his prostrate from, rousing Attis with her sweet blooms that brush his cheeks like kisses


Where you ON something when you wrote this?!!!

Cheers

AVis

rosiedlm at 11:44 on 01 May 2008  Report this post
Lovely stuff Jennifer. Really visual especially your descriptions of the incantations escaping from her mouth. And I agree with the others, don't let your son read this, however old he is!

Best,
Rosie



tusker at 14:03 on 01 May 2008  Report this post
Thanks Avis and Rosie, Son is 42 years old. No kids. Lives in Aussie but is back for a visit. Have books on Celtic legends since childhood. So there's a touch of plagiarism on this theme of May Day legends. The first draft was written at 3.30am, wide awake and very sober.

Jennifer

Nella at 16:49 on 01 May 2008  Report this post
Great, Jennifer! It's so interesting to see what people come up with.
I really liked the mythological idea that his blood turned into deep blue violets. I think I'm going to remember that everytime I see a violet. (Love violets.)
Best,
Robin


tusker at 17:00 on 01 May 2008  Report this post
Thanks Robin. There are so many Celtic myths and known rites eg: cattle walking through circles of fire for cleansing which was carried out at the start of their New Year, Beltane, in May. My parents thought reading those legends was very educational. Little did they know the contents.

Jennifer

Nella at 09:25 on 02 May 2008  Report this post
It's like Grimm's Fairy Tales, Jennifer. They are very brutal, and yet children love them...
A long long time ago I used to love reading Celtic myths and such, but I can't much remember them.
Robin

Neezes at 20:04 on 17 March 2011  Report this post
Great use of language, as the others have said. I enjoyed this - an imaginative approach to the genre theme. I wondered if
Falling to her kness, her long skirt drenched in his life's blood,
makes it seem like she already has blood on her before she has knelt in it?
Oh, and ouch!

Jonathan

tusker at 07:23 on 18 March 2011  Report this post
Thanks Jonathan.

I'll think about that one.

Jennifer


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