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Generations

by tusker 

Posted: 23 May 2008
Word Count: 311
Summary: Flash fiction challenge: A cop out. It's based on an old article spliced. Have written about this area, I think, in WWW


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I tread ancient paths, sending up clouds of insects feasting on the nectar of dewberry flowers. Aromas, sweet but indefinable, rise from sandy hillocks and in front of me, haughty in her Witches Hat, the dune grows closer, her smile etched into sandy cliffs from where wisps float on a warm, dawn brezze.

The sun, a half golden orb, creeps up above the brow of Ogmore, glittering its rays on placid water where dots of gulls bob and, below, in rock pools, seaweeds swish in gentle motion like a brown carpet.

Skylarks soar upwards, away from their nests hidden amongst clumps of coarse grass that spreads feathery heads, thigh high. A grass snake slumbers, curled on a path of moss waiting for the sun to warm its blood into motion.

Reaching the base of Witches Hat, clambering up its smiling face, I get to the top and, looking down, see stunted trees in hollows. Then sudden movement flashes and a glimpse of an archaic shadow, skimming low over reeds that shield fresh water springs and their bounty of cress, heads towards the esturary.

As the heron disappears, I wonder if I sit, listen and watch, could I conjure up in my mind's eye, the many generations that now lie deep beneath my feet under the weight of this sandy mountain. Generations of Beaker, Bronze and Iron Age people that lived, toiled in what was once a lush, flat landscape.

Long dead, the echoes of their toil, the cutting down of trees and vegetation seems to reach my ears and through, half closed eyes, I can see gale force winds whipping up wild seas taking advantage of Nature's natural protection; a protection withdrawn from the people who created those settlements.

But oblvious to the sand encroaching further inland, they continued to clear the land, losing the advantage Nature had provided for them.






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Prospero at 19:35 on 23 May 2008  Report this post
Lovely, Jennifer

I very much like the way you have captured how Nature and previous generations who lived closer to the earth complimented one another's natural rhythms, and how we, for all our high tech gadgets and so called greater understanding systematically wreck all their hard work.

Well done. Very thought provoking.

Best

John

tusker at 19:38 on 23 May 2008  Report this post
Thanks John, glad you appreciated the message.

Jennifer

V`yonne at 20:57 on 23 May 2008  Report this post
The sun, a half golden orb, creeps up above the brow of Ogmore,
Aw, lovely - reminded me of visiting Tinkin's Wood in the Vale of Glamorgan, this... Jennifer - you made me homesick!

tusker at 06:48 on 24 May 2008  Report this post
Yes, a beautiful place especially on top of Witches Hat, the views are great at dawn. Thanks Oonah. Know it's not a real flash but I enjoyed doing it.

Jennifer

Nella at 10:50 on 24 May 2008  Report this post
Beautiful and poetic description, Jennifer.

tusker at 11:59 on 24 May 2008  Report this post
Thanks Robin. Wales is beautiful.

Jennifer

Forbes at 12:12 on 24 May 2008  Report this post
Hi Jennifer

Lets get the picks out of the way!

dawn brezze
a breeze?


Witches Hat
Witch's?


sandy mountain
missing "?" ?


vegetation seems
missing "," between these words?

Lovely atmosphere in this. I can feel the roll of the years. Poetic language.

Nice one Jennifer.

Cheers

AVis


rosiedlm at 14:41 on 24 May 2008  Report this post
Very poetic and I got a real sense of the peace, both internal and external, you can find when you are by the sea.

Lovely descriptions.

Best
Rosie

tusker at 15:16 on 24 May 2008  Report this post
Thanks Avis. Take your points. Sandy mountain? I suppose, that's what it is to me as it's as high as Margam Mountain and is claimed to be the highest dune in Europe.

Thanks too, Rosie. Yes it's a peaceful place at dawn and dusk. Michael Bentine wrote, years ago, that if one concentrates or should I say meditate, you will see past generations. Strange but true.

Jennifer

lrera at 17:46 on 24 May 2008  Report this post
Hi,
Absolutely beautiful imagery. Quite lovely and moving. The factor of time passed magnifies the point.

one point:
I can see gale force winds whipping up wild seas taking advantage of Nature's natural protection;


A bit of rewording here. You can see the results of wind whipping up the seas, but not the wind itself. Sorry if this is nit-picky...

Great work,

Lou

Nella at 19:54 on 24 May 2008  Report this post
Wales really does sound so beautiful - I've heard much about it, and I really will have to visit some day!
Robin

Forbes at 23:50 on 24 May 2008  Report this post
Try Cornwall too Robin.. A beautiful part of the UK. Unlike the rest of the country...and the Peak district, the Lake district too are lovely parts. Now Suffolk is so flat - but still very striking; not as flat as Norfolk though, which is wonderfully desolate and empty in places.

Cheers

AVis

<Added>

...er I've just re-read my rec here, and I DIDN'T mean the rest of the UK wasn't lovely!! Just that Cornwall is unlike the rest of the UK in it's topography!!

Oh er missus! Don't get me writing brochures for the tourist board!!! :$

Forbes at 00:14 on 25 May 2008  Report this post
No Jennifer

I meant should there be a ? on the end of the sentence

I wonder if I sit, listen and watch, could I conjure up in my mind's eye, the many generations that now lie deep beneath my feet under the weight of this sandy mountain.


as you pose a question in it.

Beautiful piece though, so evocative.

Avis

tusker at 07:11 on 25 May 2008  Report this post
His Avis, Got what you mean now.Afraid my mind is rather muddled today. Can't concentrate on the newspaper either. Thanks.

Jennifer

tusker at 07:14 on 25 May 2008  Report this post
Thanks Lou.

Jennifer


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