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by rmol1950 

Posted: 14 June 2008
Word Count: 219
Summary: Here is my last minute rushed entry for this weeks challenge.I wish I could have given it more time.

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Throat dry and skin damp, surrounded by limp cardboard boxes of forgotten lives, lost mementoes of forgotten events. Faded photographs of strangers inhabit drawers lined with brown, brittle newspaper, often more interesting than the documents they hide. I pause and watch dust mites dance in the shafts of hot summer sunlight lancing through the gloom of the basement room. The only sound my breathing and the comforting cheep, cheep, cheep of house sparrows outside the window. And then wedged at the back of a drawer, a photograph, colours faded liked a water colour painting, edges dog eared. Two schoolboys smile happily into the camera, walking on snow covered city pavements in school caps, long navy blue raincoats, scarves and gloves, and short trousers with long grey socks. I remember the air, sharp and cold, bright sunshine glistening on the frosted edges of the red telephone box behind us. One corner of each of its small window panes obscured by a crescent of snow, like a chintzy Christmas card. Strange how memory works. I can see the frosted panes, feel the cold air in my nostrils, hear the scrunch of shoes compacting the new snow, but I canít picture the person behind the camera.

But, oh my god, I remember that boy. Once upon a time that boy was me.

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tiger_bright at 10:27 on 14 June 2008  Report this post
Hi Richard, great response to the challenge, the photo really drew me in and I was in the snow with the schoolboys. Very evocative with the limp cardboard boxes full of memories.


V`yonne at 10:38 on 14 June 2008  Report this post
Very nice
limp cardboard boxes of forgotten lives, lost mementoes of forgotten events. Faded photographs of strangers
We all have these... I might try to not repeat forgotten though. As Sarah says, you really take us into that photo.

tusker at 14:32 on 14 June 2008  Report this post
Excellent. A picture in itself.


Nella at 15:04 on 14 June 2008  Report this post
Yes, I agree, really nice. You set the scene well, drew me in. And then the surprise at recognizing what, a long time ago, you once were.

rosiedlm at 16:00 on 14 June 2008  Report this post
Hi Richard,

You managed to paint both pictures really well, and show how visual stimuli are often necessary to revive our hazy memories.

Lovely stuff,

Forbes at 23:02 on 14 June 2008  Report this post
wonderfully evocative, this one. My one little complaint is that it is all of a block, and I find that amount of text in one solid chunk daunting.

Just a preference.



Prospero at 05:42 on 16 June 2008  Report this post
A brief moment in time, perfectly captured. Well done, Richard. This is beautifully evocative.



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