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A Visit From The Jehovah`s Witnesses

by Mickey 

Posted: 02 July 2008
Word Count: 94
Summary: I haven’t written much lately so here is one I prepared earlier. I remember that the last time I posted this, I received a comment from a JW who took it in good part luckily. Absolutely no offence meant to any others who might read it (honest!)


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“I wonder - could we trouble you?”
said the short J.W,
“to tell us what you think of Sin?”
I said “It’s awful – Please, step in”.

I sat them down and made them tea,
Then we discussed amicably,
mistakes for which they said we’d pay,
on God’s awaited Judgement Day.

We spoke of death, and Faith, and such,
of sex on telly - far too much.
But then they both blushed when I said,
“I get enough of that in bed”.

There followed an embarrassed pause,
then, Bibles shut, they went next door.






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joanie at 15:21 on 02 July 2008  Report this post
Hi Mike. Amusing and accomplished, as ever! It made me smile. One question - why do the last two lines have a half-rhyme instead of the full rhyme of all the others? I think it' s quite effective, actually.

joanie

Mickey at 10:28 on 03 July 2008  Report this post
Hi Joanie. Thank you for your encouraging comment. I don’t understand the technicalities of poetry. It just seemed to ' sound' right. After the jolly banter between the author and the JWs, I imagined the whole dialogue to come to a shuddering halt by a kind of indignant, awkward pause before they made their excuses and left. The shortened last stanza (?) seemed to me to suggest that. If it were the same length as the previous verses then I didn’t feel the poem would achieve the same effect. Thanks again for reading me. Mike

James Graham at 19:36 on 04 July 2008  Report this post
Yes, I see the point of the last two lines not being rhymed, and it does work. It helps to convey the awkwardness of the JWs' departure.

Nice of you to ask them in - and make them tea! When asked what I thought of Sin, though, I' d have been inclined to say, ' I like it' . But then the departure might have been instant.

I recall comparing notes with a Catholic friend on our respective Catholic and Presbyterian religious education. ' They were always harping on about sin,' I said. ' Oh, the priests went on about sin all the time,' he said. ' And the more they talked about it, the more irresistible it seemed.'

Another highly amusing humorous poem - enjoyed it very much.

James.

Elsie at 10:33 on 06 July 2008  Report this post
Hello Mickey.Very enjoyable. (Tempted to ask if it' s true on all counts.)

Mickey at 12:25 on 07 July 2008  Report this post
Thank you James, I' m glad you enjoyed this one. Linda, of course it' s not true - you can NEVER get enough!!

Ticonderoga at 14:51 on 07 July 2008  Report this post
Another witty and beautifully crafted piece................

best,

Mike


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