 V`yonne at 15:29 on 14 July 2008
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Oh very nice flashing. I loved that second one. Surreal! The last one had a great ending too.
I just added another to mine by the way...
I thought 9 - as it' s a magical number 
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 Forbes at 16:50 on 14 July 2008
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Hi Jennifer -
I felt these were linked - were they? Wonderful stuff...quite gruesome in their way.
Think you need some punctuation here:
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to clarify your intent.
TFR
Avis
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tusker at 17:11 on 14 July 2008
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Thanks Avis. The link is loneliness. Oh, me and my punctuation.
Jennifer
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 Prospero at 20:18 on 14 July 2008
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Hi Jennifer
I don' t know why, but this reminds me of ' The Shining' . Surreal, scary and very very good.
Best
John
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 Bunbry at 23:14 on 14 July 2008
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The middle one made me smile, but the first one was my fav. Couldn' t work out what was happening in the last one - sorry!
Nick
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Forbes at 02:22 on 15 July 2008
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No I meant linked by the MC' s different snapshots of the same one?
Avis
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tusker at 14:42 on 15 July 2008
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Thanks Prosp. Hubby often says I behave like the ' Shining' writer when interrupted without the homicidal actions, of course.
Jennifer
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tusker at 14:46 on 15 July 2008
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Well Nick, the first one is a painting of a child who haunts her owner. The second, speaks for itself, loneliness in marriage, unable to utter her true thoughts. The third character is a prisoner, looking at a picture of a frozen scene and feeling it.
Jennifer
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tusker at 14:47 on 15 July 2008
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They' re different scenes. Different characters, Avis. Sorry, I got it wrong, your question.
Jennifer
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Bunbry at 16:41 on 15 July 2008
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Thanks for explaining Jennifer, I fully understood the first one but hadn' t realised the second one was a metaphor.
I can see my O' Level woodwork isn' t going to be help me much in this group!
Nick
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tusker at 17:13 on 15 July 2008
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I left school without any qualifications. Married in my teens. Did menial part time jobs after the kids were old enough. Started writing at 40. You don' t need qualifications to be a writer. You must want to write. Have an imagination and determination. Read, read and read.
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Jumbo at 18:09 on 15 July 2008
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Jennifer.
Loved these - especially number 2.
That image of tumbling thoughts did it for me.
And loved blizzard and buzzard in the last one, as well.
Thanks for the read.
john
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tiger_bright at 13:51 on 17 July 2008
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Hi Jennifer, wickedly good flashing. Eclectic! I loved the mock gore of the middle one and the first was spooky (I had dolls just like that as a child). The last one was very sad.
Tiger
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 crowspark at 23:34 on 18 July 2008
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Hi Jennifer
The first one was a stunner! The second flash I loved and wished I';d written it. The third was a great idea although I wasn';t sure how well rural, blizzard and buzzard worked together. Perhaps I would change rural to something more evocative. I';m thinking sublime Romantic landscapes, all shock and awe maybe?
A terrific trio.
Bill
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Elbowsnitch at 05:42 on 19 July 2008
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Jennifer bleak and yet so rich in language and thought - I love these surreal horror flashes. The loneliness theme resonates strongly.
Frances
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tusker at 09:10 on 19 July 2008
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Thanks Bill. I';ve the painting on a wall leading up the stairs which was once my mother';s. Can';t part with it but the child does haunt me. The third one is a photo I received, years ago, from Alaska. The middle one speaks for itself.
Jennifer
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titania177 at 19:19 on 19 July 2008
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Ooh, Jennifer, the first one bursts with atmosphere, I love it. And the second one is wonderfully quirky. I misread the third, I think because it might need a comma after "her clothes", but when I read it right it was very sad, I could picture her. Thanks, great flashes!
Tania
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