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Impossible things

by joanie 

Posted: 06 October 2008
Word Count: 52
Summary: For the Flash Poetry challenge


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To stand dry-eyed
when jazz bands
swagger by

To keep your mouth closed
when the group plays
‘Walk on by’

To sit straight-faced
while gulls and eagles
swirl into the sky

To carry on as normal
when a loved one
says good-bye

To watch in silence
while your children
live a lie.






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V`yonne at 23:08 on 06 October 2008  Report this post
Oh that last one is a corker, Joanie! Watching anyone live a lie it's hard to bite your tongue but a child...Impossible indeed. Very good.

(I don't like Jazz but I'll take your word on that one.)

joanie at 23:16 on 06 October 2008  Report this post
Gosh, Oonah - that was fast! Originally I had 'brass bands pass by' but the rhythm wasn't right somehow. I preferred 'swagger', which only works with jazz bands. I always fill up when I watch a brass band parade. Perhaps I'll re-think!

Thanks for the challenge and for responding so quickly!!

joanie

Nella at 08:20 on 07 October 2008  Report this post
Yeah, that ending really hits you. Wow, Joanie, good poem! I really like it.
Robin

joanie at 18:59 on 07 October 2008  Report this post
Thanks, Robin! Glad you like it.

joanie

MarlaD at 11:43 on 09 October 2008  Report this post
Very profound ending Joanie! Im not getting the gulls & eagles thing..I guess you had to be there, but great poem all the same x

DJC at 17:15 on 09 October 2008  Report this post
Joanie - I have to say that I don't usually like poems with the rhyme at the end of each stanza, but in this case it works. I think it is the final stanza which draws the images of the other stanza together and leave you with a final thought.

Haadi at 06:02 on 10 October 2008  Report this post
You gave me the shivers after a whirlwind quick read (sorry not much time to muse and comment) but you hit the right note that's for sure!

joanie at 16:17 on 10 October 2008  Report this post
Thanks to you all. MarlaD, I meant that when I see birds swooping so majestically and effortlessly, I can't help smiling or gasping aloud or commenting about the magnificence of it all.

Thanks for reading and responding!

joanie

tractor at 09:40 on 11 October 2008  Report this post
Hi Joanie,

beautiful poem.

Mark

joanie at 14:29 on 11 October 2008  Report this post
Thanks, Mark!

joanie

Elsie at 21:47 on 11 October 2008  Report this post
Well done Joanie,makes me think of that terribly famous one whose name escapes me...

joanie at 01:09 on 12 October 2008  Report this post
Hi Elsie! Glad you could pop in to WW - thanks for reading and commenting. Let me know when your deli is going to be on TV! - November, was it?

joanie


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