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Posted: 10 October 2008
Word Count: 12
Summary: I haven't done a haiku for ages!

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twilight filters through
rainy days until Hope sits
up and takes notice

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Posted by : Alan Summers at 22:04 on 10 October 2008

Hi Joanie,

I like the poem, but I feel experiential haiku is superior to anything calcaluted to make non-on Japanese haiku.

What made you on a gut level write a poem?

Posted by : V`yonne at 14:31 on 11 October 2008

I like it. Is personification okay in Haiku? I'm not an expert...

Posted by : joanie at 20:46 on 14 October 2008

Oonah, I have no idea whether personification is acceptable in Haiku! Perhaps I'll find out soon!

Posted by : joanie at 20:51 on 14 October 2008

Alan, I have to confess that I have been avoiding replying to your response! On a gut level, what made me write a poem??!! This really made me think! I suppose I looked out of the window, saw the rain and the twilight, and thought that, despite the greyness, the sunny days will return.

In response to Oonah's query - is personification OK in Haiku??

Thanks in anticipation.

joanie

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