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All This Time

by LMJT 

Posted: 23 October 2008
Word Count: 300
Summary: For the 300 word challenge I set this week on 'All This Time'. Just thought I’d have a go to get myself back in the rhythm.


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Her hands tremble slightly as she holds the silver five and zero above the centre of the card. That is the centre, isn’t it? She squints, moves it to the left, the right. When did something like this become a challenge? she wonders as she presses the figures down. When did her body begin to betray her?

With the card finished, she looks up and sees him reading the newspaper in the garden. As if sensing her gaze, he holds up his hand in greeting, an action she mirrors.

Time has come and gone and they have changed before one another’s eyes. ‘The silver tops,’ the grandchildren call them, and they’re right of course, but in her mind she is the same girl she was when they met. And he is the same boy.

It had been muggy at the fair that August evening and, as she stepped onto the Ferris wheel with Juliette, she saw him holding the cardigan she’d draped over her shoulders.

‘It must have fallen off,’ she said to Juliette, aware that he was watching her as they ascended higher and higher.

When the ride was over and she stepped onto the soft grass, he handed back her cardigan and asked if he could buy her a drink. Not here, he said. Somewhere they could talk.

The next Saturday, they’d spent the evening talking: about their families, their dreams, their hopes and fears. They’d talked until the moon was sparkling on the sea beside them, a night diamond. They’d held hands as he walked her home.

‘Can I see you again?’ he’d asked, his face lit by the glow of porch light, and she’d said ‘yes’ before she’d even heard the question.

Their love started then, fifty years ago, and it has lasted all this time.






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tusker at 10:39 on 24 October 2008  Report this post
Warm and romantic, Liam.

Loved the unspoken knowledge between them. He, aware of her looking at him without glancing up from his newspaper, raising his hand and she, mirroring the action.

Scares me though, I'll be 67 when I reach our Golden Wedding Anniversary. God!

LMJT at 11:10 on 24 October 2008  Report this post
Ah, thanks for reading. Glad you liked it.

Liam

Bunbry at 18:47 on 24 October 2008  Report this post
Hi Liam, it was very well written [as always!] but for me, it amounted to little more than an account of how a couple met.

Nick

V`yonne at 20:14 on 24 October 2008  Report this post
I think it's a bit tell but it's lovely...sigh.

Elbowsnitch at 08:30 on 25 October 2008  Report this post
Liam - nice to hear about true love lasting! It's conflict that makes a story, they say - but this is a lovely picture.

Frances

Forbes at 22:42 on 25 October 2008  Report this post
Beautiful Liam, soft and gentle. very poignant.

Well done.

Avis

crowspark at 00:09 on 26 October 2008  Report this post
A gentle and romantic flash.
My only suggestion would be to resolve in some way the sense that her body betrays her. Maybe she calls him in and they finish the card together?
Thanks for the read.

choille at 15:49 on 26 October 2008  Report this post
Hi Liam this is nice.
At first I thought the woman was doing something black magic with the cards - silly me.

Gentle & touching with the love enduring.

All the best
Caroline.

Prospero at 18:50 on 05 November 2008  Report this post
Gorgeous, Liam, a lovely, gentle piece that flows naturally.

Well done

Best

John





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