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Not Quite a Coven

by rosiedlm 

Posted: 07 November 2008
Word Count: 158
Summary: My entry for Drip/Tap challenge


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The teenager turned into a witch overnight. And I had created her - I don’t know how, but it was down to me that this creature has been released on the world. And it was down to me to make sure she doesn’t harm anyone, including herself. Easier said than done, I say.

Like a leaking tap, my energy drips away. Every “No” has a screeching response. Every “Can you…?” is cursed. Every “Please…” met with silence. Someone once told me to count to ten. But numbers mean nothing when the red mist of anger clouds your vision. When your heart beats a dent in your chest, your voice becomes a shrill wail, your feet hurt from stomping and banging, and your head thumps like the doors you slam.

I feed her, clothe her and keep her warm while she casts spells in her hovel of a room.

Now I am the wicked one and she the enchantress.






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crowspark at 23:08 on 07 November 2008  Report this post
Ah Rosie, I bless the fact I had boys!
But I did feel for the poor mother, a Pandora waiting for healing hope's emergence.
Lovely flash.
Bill

rosiedlm at 23:30 on 07 November 2008  Report this post
Yes Bill, boys are different and, judging by my son's behaviour, much more gentle.

Thanks for reading,
Rosie

Forbes at 23:48 on 07 November 2008  Report this post
Coo Rosie, can I have one (a boy) like that! Mine's the male counter part of La Diva up there! Not quite Kevin, but on occasion - getting there.

Heart felt, it felt!

Cheers

Avis

V`yonne at 23:56 on 07 November 2008  Report this post
That's why the wee girl at the end of my story is right never to change her mind

tusker at 05:11 on 08 November 2008  Report this post
Loved it Rosie, brings back memories of mine. Thank goodness they grow up.

Jennifer

Elbowsnitch at 08:05 on 08 November 2008  Report this post
All-out teenage hell - a vivid picture, Rosie! Love the rapid shifts in persona and role. You could develop this even further.

Frances

Prospero at 09:29 on 08 November 2008  Report this post
Hi Rosie

Very funny and oh so true. I enjoyed this.

Best

John

tiger_bright at 10:45 on 08 November 2008  Report this post
Yikes, Rosie, I have a daughter and this scared the heck out of me! She's only seven but all this in store..!

When your heart beats a dent in your chest, your voice becomes a shrill wail, your feet hurt from stomping and banging, and your head thumps like the doors you slam.

Loved those sounds and the shape of the sentences.

Tiger

Nella at 17:39 on 08 November 2008  Report this post
Good one, enjoyed it, Rosie!

rosiedlm at 20:49 on 09 November 2008  Report this post
This is her daughter and I'm not that bad.

rosiedlm at 21:34 on 09 November 2008  Report this post
Thanks everyone for reading and commenting. As you can see from the comment above, I accidentally left this on my screen and my daughter read this piece! She took it well, though, laughed it off and is still talking to me. Phew!

Best,

Rosie


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