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Our Secret

by Esther Frances 

Posted: 09 December 2008
Word Count: 93


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He wanted to remain
in her secret attic
To make his awkward way
down the runway
the illuminated pathway
that led to her
To play in her yard
swing on imaginary ropes
balance on her seesaw
Play peek a boo
with lacy underwear
he wanted to call in sick
To not be noticed missing
Not appear on milk cartons
in the US of A
To not be asked to role play

But to be naked and raw
In her arms

To be soothed and stroked
Like a non chalant kitten

Without kid gloves






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Account Closed at 19:27 on 12 December 2008  Report this post
Hello Esther Frances
you use an interesting interplay between themes of childhood and more adult themes in this piece.
I wonder if your character is a boy or a man, or are you saying that all men are boys?
This verges on titilation, as if the character you refer to is virginal, a teenager, to your female character's Mrs Robinson. I may be someway off the mark in this interpretation of your meaning in this piece, and apologise if I am, but there is something almost disturbing about parts of the imagery. Thought provoking as ever in your writing.


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