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Hatchlings

by tusker 

Posted: 21 January 2009
Word Count: 171
Summary: For flash 1 challenge: new writing iluding fish.


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She tapped the egg. It sounded hollow. She tapped it once more. The shell wouldn’t crack. She whacked it hard with a hammer. It split open and an eel- like creature unfurled to balance on thin, tapered fins.

Within the split shell, Jemma noticed another smaller egg. She picked it up. It moved a little at her touch. Squeezing the shell, the second egg burst open and a tiny fish-like creature slithered out and off her palm to join its taller sibling.

Once both were conjoined, these mysterious creatures resembled a single exclamation mark. ‘What are you?’ Jemma asked in stunned fascination.

The smaller hatchling arched its body on top of the other’s head. Now both looked like a perfect but immature question mark.

At that moment, a mystery was revealed; a mystery that Jemma had puzzled over ever since she was a small child.

Who, back in the far distant past, had invented exclamation and question marks?

The answer came to her. Two black hatchlings at the dawn of writing.






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V`yonne at 16:59 on 21 January 2009  Report this post
That's brilliant, Jennifer. I love it. Punctuation mysteriously hatching - what a great notion.

tusker at 17:16 on 21 January 2009  Report this post
Thanks a lot, Oonah.

They do look like worms or little eels to me.

Jennifer

Bunbry at 21:20 on 21 January 2009  Report this post
What a nice take on the theme Jennifer, very imaginative and delicate. Tiny point, not sure about the 'New' on the last line as it is already implied when you say 'dawn'. See what the others think though.

Nick

tusker at 06:59 on 22 January 2009  Report this post
Thanks Oonah for your tip. Will give them a try.

Jennifer

tusker at 07:00 on 22 January 2009  Report this post
Thanks Nick for your kind comments.

Yes, you're right. Will erase 'new.'

Jennifer

Prospero at 13:34 on 22 January 2009  Report this post
Very good, Jennifer, we use these things without wondering where they came from. I believe in Shakespeare's time there was only full-stops, or periods, as Brian will no doubt remind us.

Great story and definitely nouveau.

Best

Prosp

tusker at 13:50 on 22 January 2009  Report this post
Thank you, John.

Now you know the answer.

Jennifer

Elbowsnitch at 17:24 on 22 January 2009  Report this post
Brilliant, Jennifer. So imaginative and cute! I particularly like
It split open and an eel-like creature unfurled to balance on thin, tapered fins.


Frances

tusker at 18:07 on 22 January 2009  Report this post
Thanks Frances.

Jennifer

Jubbly at 14:49 on 23 January 2009  Report this post
Very clever Jennifer, great concept.

J
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tiger_bright at 14:54 on 23 January 2009  Report this post
Lovely writing, Jennifer, and a cute idea as Frances says. I was actually a bit disappointed that they were only ! and ? (I'd have liked something more mystical) but of course this was perfect for the challenge. Really liked it, thanks.

Tiger

tusker at 15:45 on 23 January 2009  Report this post
Thanks Julie.

jennifer

tusker at 15:46 on 23 January 2009  Report this post
Thanks Sarah.

Jennifer

Jordan789 at 17:49 on 25 January 2009  Report this post
Hah- this is a little out there for my taste. Two slithery black eels. Alrighty. It becomes almost a satire of fantasy, with a twinge of mother-goosery embedded. I would have been slightly freaked out. I wonder what they eat?

tusker at 18:55 on 25 January 2009  Report this post
They eat tiny people, Jordan.

Jennifer

Jordan789 at 03:42 on 26 January 2009  Report this post
how horrible for them, Jennifer. I wonder if Jemma will try to help them fight off the ravenous grammatically prone serpents.


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