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Painting The Days

by tusker 

Posted: 06 February 2009
Word Count: 452
Summary: For flash 2 challenge: sweat and tears.


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It had taken years of painstaking work. Like a diary, in squares the size of playing cards, Jay depicted daily events on the walls of her sitting room.

It started that day in August, 1965, when James sent a note around to her flat, saying, “Sorry, but I can’t go through with it. Please forgive me.”

Heartbroken, Jay had stood in that sitting-room, a room in which they would have shared a future full of love and laughter. Then, taking a slender brush from her collection, she painted a bride standing alone holding a bouquet of yellow roses; the bride’s face shielded by a veil.

From that day, Jay added more scenes, some insignificant, some momentous; the sudden death of her sister in a car accident painted in black with stick like mourners walking behind a black, plumed horse. Her retirement party depicted in grey. Forced happy faces.

Every banal happening, she painted day by day, year in year out. The sitting-room was empty of furniture, but the walls were full of crazy, miniature murals that would astonish any visitor, but Jay discouraged callers. Kept herself to herself.

Sometimes, her tiny murals were blurred with her tears. Often, at the end of the day, she tried resisting the urge to enter that room to add to her collection of memories, but her resistance always crumbled before bedtime.

Today, on her short walk to the Post Office, she’d side- stepped away from an elderly gentleman hanging onto a Zimmer frame.

He smiled. She smiled. He frowned. Then said, ‘Jay, is it really you?’

She studied his face. Remembered those brown eyes. ‘James?’

He’d nodded. ‘You haven’t changed much.’

‘Nor have you,’ she’d lied.

‘How have you been keeping?’ he asked.

‘Fine,’ she replied.

‘Do you still live around here?’ She nodded. He smiled a little sadly. ‘I’m a widower now. Moved back about six months ago. Maybe we can meet up sometime? Catch up on the good old days?’

A car horn tooted. ‘That’s my taxi,’ he said, and taking out a small card from his jacket pocket, handed it to her. It read, “James Fraser. The Manse. Dunely. Tel. No. 0098345.”

Watching her old love hobbling towards the taxi, Jay wanted to cry but she didn’t. Collecting her pension, she raced home anxious to add another painting to her forty four year collection.

Now, as the temperature rises, having no space left on her walls, Jay climbs up a ladder and through the open window, a welcome breeze cools the sweat that runs in tiny rivulets down her neck, back and arms.

In her hand, she holds a large brush and, with wide sweeping movements, paints lavish, swirling patterns in vibrant crimson.











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Nella at 13:13 on 06 February 2009  Report this post
Wonderful, Jennifer. I love the idea of all those little murals painted on the wall. It's a creative way to deal with loneliness. And fits the challenge to a T

I think something is missing from this sentence:
Heartbroken, Jay had stood in that sitting-room, a room she’d imagined they would share a future full of love and laughter.
a room in which they would share??

side stepped
Should that be hyphenated?

Robin

tusker at 14:23 on 06 February 2009  Report this post
Thanks Robin.

Thanks too for the pointers. Will change them.

Jennifer

Forbes at 18:02 on 06 February 2009  Report this post
Wonderful slant on the challenge. I felt so sorry for her, in a Miss Haversham-wasted-her-life-over-some-bloody-bloke-kind-of-way. Some powerful images, but I wished she'd tripped him up on his zimmer frame!

CHeers

Avis ;

tusker at 08:39 on 07 February 2009  Report this post
Thanks Avis.

This lady, I'm afraid, is the opposite to you and me. I'd have wrapped the Zimmer around his scrawny neck.

Jennifer



Bunbry at 11:18 on 07 February 2009  Report this post
Another cracker Jennifer, you have a startling imagination that so often bowls me over!

I did get a bit mixed up about the old lady climbing out of her window. What did she hold on to? She had a piant brush in one hand so it all sound very dangerous!!

Nick

tusker at 12:54 on 07 February 2009  Report this post
Thanks Nick.

Had to laugh. She's not climbing through the window!! She's up a ladder painting another mural on the ceiling.

It's the breeze coming in through the window that cools her sweat.

Jennifer



Bunbry at 15:21 on 07 February 2009  Report this post
I think a comma might be in the wrong place in this then!
Jay climbs up a ladder and through the open window, a welcome breeze...


Try
Jay climbs up a ladder, and through the open window a welcome breeze...


But I did like the idea of her clinging onto the wall like spiderman!

Nick

V`yonne at 12:52 on 08 February 2009  Report this post
I thought she was going to rush home and whitewash the walls. Great story, Jennifer

<Added>

Oh and the rat-fink was a clergyman too!

Nik Perring at 12:47 on 10 February 2009  Report this post
Fab! What great imagery!

Nik

tusker at 14:56 on 10 February 2009  Report this post
Thank you Nik, glad you liked it.

Jennifer

Prospero at 14:42 on 15 February 2009  Report this post
Lovely, Jennifer.

Stunning idea and imagery.

I can just imagine the house being bought by the Tate Modern.

Great tale beautifully told.

Best

Prosp

tusker at 15:26 on 15 February 2009  Report this post
Many thanks, Prosp.

Nice to hear from you again.


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