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My First Girlfriend

by Jordan789 

Posted: 26 February 2009
Word Count: 299
Summary: For this week's challenge. I swear this isn't autobiographical. I've never even been camping!


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Lauren asked me to be her boyfriend. She has blond highlights, and tan Virginian skin.

“What about TJ?” I asked.

“He’s got a dick like a French fry,” she said. She looked at her friend Jenny, who held up her pinky in concurrence.

“Oh,” I said. Lauren had pink nail polish on her toes, and her feet were pampered with dirt.

“So? Do you want to be my boyfriend for the week?” My family would be staying until Tuesday, and then returned to Newbridge. Rhode Island.

“Yeah,” I said. “I do.”

“Good. Meet us at four at the beach,” she said. As she walked away I stared at the shape of her body, listened to her sandals flopping against her feet.


“Can I go swimming, Mom?”

“Is it safe?” She says. I know that she’s thinking about the time at Robert Moses, when she warned me of the undertow, and I shrieked until the lifeguard made a scene.

“Come on,” I whine.

“Be careful,” she says. “You’re not a very good swimmer.”

On the way to the beach, as the main camp road cuts past the supply store and the basketball courts, I think about my penis. The problem (whether I have a French fry-dick or not) is that I probably do. I think about a French fry and my penis. I think about how when you climb onto a dock, or get out of a pool, the bathing suit clings to your body like saran wrap. Everything is visible, if they look.

From the basketball court, TJ sees me. “Hey,” he says. “Do you want to play?”

I look down at my flip flops, and my little pink toes. Poor TJ.

“Go get your sneakers,” he says.

“Can you give me five minutes to get my sneakers?”

“Sure.”






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choille at 10:54 on 27 February 2009  Report this post
Well Jordan is the little lad exploring his feminine side?

I like the flopping noise of sandal against the girls feet - obviously he did too.

Well written.

Great flash
All the best
Caroline.

Jordan789 at 16:29 on 27 February 2009  Report this post
hah

wasn't what i was going for, but you know, once it's in the reader's hands...

Thanks for reading.

Jumbo at 22:32 on 27 February 2009  Report this post
Jordan

Hi

So our little MC lost his bottle, and gave up the girl for a game of basketball! And all because he thought he might have a penis like a French fry?

Surely not? No guy is going to use the word 'penis' in a circumstance like that!

But that's just a small prick, sorry... just a small pick!

btw, I think I'd cut to get my sneakers? from Can you give me five minutes to get my sneakers? to make that line of dialogue read more smoothly.

A great flash Jordan. Neatly done.

Thanks for the read.

john

crowspark at 15:07 on 28 February 2009  Report this post
Great flash, Jordan. Loved the flopping sandals.

No french fries for me tonight!

Elbowsnitch at 20:41 on 28 February 2009  Report this post
Jordan, I love Jenny holding up her finger in concurrence. These girls have seen plenty! Not surprised our narrator chickened out and opted for basketball. Nice flash!

Frances

tusker at 10:48 on 01 March 2009  Report this post
A good flash on growing up, Jordan with MC's hormones beginning to race.

Penis is not a word boys use, especailly of that age. Prick, dick and in this part of the world, John Thomas.

Jennifer

Bunbry at 12:42 on 01 March 2009  Report this post
A great idea for a tale, but I could not get a handle on the age of the kids involved. The girls seemed much older [about 17] than the lad [seemed about 11].

That aside, good stuff.

Nick


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