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The Titan`s Grip

by Jordan789 

Posted: 30 April 2009
Word Count: 419
Summary: This is a completely different story, sorry. I changed this one entirely into something else. Didn't feel like that other one had enough oomph.


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The rain fell like cicadas dropping from the skies. The clouds covered the earth like a blanket of factory smoke.

And, from the porch rocking chair, where Grandma used to sit and knit her fucking blankets, I watched what remained of my life dripping from his fists.

He held me in the palm of his hands, at his whim, at his decision. "If you don't like it, you can leave. This is my house. My food. Those are my shoes on your feet!"

Even Mom stepped in at that one. "Grolash," she said. But nothing more.

So I left. I packed an extra pair of jeans, and four pairs of underwear, and the only thing special I had was a shark tooth pendant--a great white, i think--that I believed protected me from whatever was out there. I had no money. I had no where to go. So I walked.

I watched the cars, because I knew one of them I would know. My grandparents, coming home from a doctor's appointment, or my mother, from work, or my father--no, spite and stubborness had been piled up between us, for fourteen years, hardening like petrified shit.

Then I heard the car and I knew it was him before I could ever do a thing about it. He still had his tie on. The car crept up real slow. "Hey," he said. "Do you want a ride?"

"My house," I said. Where was it? "It's right there," I said. "I don't live with you anymore." I pointed at a grey house. I didn't know who lived there.

"No, it's not. The Wilson's live there. Get in the car. I'll take you to your stupid party."

Hardening poop.

I walked up to the porch. The grass was wet. The porch light was on. The paint had been chipping from the handrail, and I saw it, and I suddenly wanted to help sand it down and repaint it. I wouldn't do it at home, but I would do it for whoever the hell lived here. "I'll help paint the fucking fence," I said. Then I heard his feet slapping against the grass. I heard him panting like a diseased coyote that had found a limp chicken, a small piece of food that might stave off starvation for another week. I felt his hand around the back of my neck. And I was lifted off the ground, wrapped in iron, completely powerless.

"What do you think would happen if I could..." but I had nothing.






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tusker at 06:53 on 01 May 2009  Report this post
I enjoyed this one-sided discussion, Jordan, and the little interjections from the poor person who asked the original question.

Loved the everyday question at the end after all that steaming off.

Jennifer

Jubbly at 09:58 on 01 May 2009  Report this post
Very funny and oh so true. I'm a real half empty glass kind of gal myself, constantly battling the demons, so to hear about the clappy happy people only thinking happy thoughts 3 times a day has really cheered me up.

J
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Forbes at 16:55 on 01 May 2009  Report this post
Nice rant.

one pick:


and that's probably all about all that happens, and you can wipe your ass with all of the philosophizing and studies that go along with it all.


far too many "all"s - and surely one too many?

Avis

Bunbry at 11:19 on 02 May 2009  Report this post
This is powerful, with lots of great imagery, but as a story I'm not sure it's fully formed. For example,you start with heavy rain [brilliant picture] but it's not mentioned again. And not sure what happened to the party he was off to either.

But tidy up these loose ends and you'll have a cracker.

Nick


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