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The Housekeeper

by tusker 

Posted: 10 June 2009
Word Count: 421
Summary: For flash 1 challenge


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Behind the closed door, Eleanor Price went about her daily chores at The Cedars. Silence filled the house but she was alert to the voice that called down from upstairs many times a day for her attention.

‘Eleanor,’ that sweet voice would say as she stepped into the bedroom. ‘I need a change of clothes.’

And Eleanor would often think, “I’m fed up with all this washing and ironing,” but of course, she kept silent. She’d smile and together they’d select a fresh outfit from a wardrobe groaning with clothes, handbags and shoes suitable for every occasion.

Four nights a week, the boyfriend came round and after each visit, Eleanor’s deep attraction for him grew. On those nights, Eleanor cajoled, persuaded and not once had retaliated when her judgement was questioned as to what her employer should wear.

“Don’t see the point. Your clothes will be off your back within ten minutes of him getting here,” is what she’d wanted to say but, of course, she didn’t.

Apart from her caretaking tasks, Eleanor had all the pets to tend to. Each one had their special needs and diets. Then there were the cars to wax and polish, and if one smudge was found, the elegant house echoed with her employer’s fury.

Eleanor, well used to these tirades, always waited for calm to return before rubbing off the offending smudge with a clean duster.

Nightly and forever indulgent, Eleanor made herself scarce when the boyfriend arrived. Tall and muscular, he bounded up those stairs like an athlete. Downstairs, she listened to their laughter and furious love-making and, as she listened, her sense of isolation churned inside her like poison.

Today, after returning from the supermarket Eleanor, going in through the back door, gasped at the mess in the usually pristine kitchen. Pans and glasses were smashed. Flour covered work tops. Rushing from the kitchen, slithering on debris, and out into the hall, she called up, ‘Barbie! Barbie!’

No answering reply came. Frightened, Eleanor bounded up the stairs, ran down the corridor and burst into the bedroom. There on the floor, Barbie’s torso lay naked, and her decapitated head squished under Eleanor’s heavy tread. Screaming, Eleanor raced back downstairs to call the police about the horrific murder that had confronted her

Weeks later, Eleanor sits hunched on a hospital bed in Maple Tree Psychiatric Unit. Under her pillow Ken, Barbie’s lover, lies dressed in camouflage and, though she doesn't admit to it, she's secretly glad that she now has Ken all to herself.










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Prospero at 11:27 on 10 June 2009  Report this post
Hi Jennifer

You wrong-footed me completely with this one I didn't see it coming, even though I stumbled over Eleanor squishing the decapitated head. Good stuff. Thanks for a great read.

A bijou pick. Can you smash pans? It seemed a bit odd in the context.

Best

John




tusker at 14:25 on 10 June 2009  Report this post
So glad I wrong footed you, John.

You're right about the pans. I just dent mine.

Jennifer

Jordan789 at 21:44 on 11 June 2009  Report this post
Hi Tusker,

I was pulled right into this story, and was with it up to the point of Eleanor stepping on Barbie's squishy head, and then the ending. And then I just became very, very confused.

Jordan

Findy at 05:37 on 12 June 2009  Report this post
Good one Jennifer, enjoyed it very much

tusker at 06:24 on 12 June 2009  Report this post
Sorry for the confusion, Jordan.

Eleanor is living in a Barbie world. In her mind, Barbie's real and this lonely confused lady falls in love with Ken. The vandalism and destruction was her own doing.

She's a mad as a March Hare. I suppose it takes one to know one.

Jennifer

tusker at 06:25 on 12 June 2009  Report this post
Many thanks Findy. Glad you enjoyed it.

Jennifer

LMJT at 16:53 on 12 June 2009  Report this post
Hi Jennifer,

Well, this was a treat! You had me completely! Excellent stuff. It reminded me of Working Girl with Melanie Griffith when Sigourney Weaver is laid up with a bad leg.

Thanks for the read.

Liam

tusker at 19:41 on 12 June 2009  Report this post
Thanks Liam. So glad you were taken in.

Never watched that film, but it sounds good.

Jennifer

Jumbo at 16:57 on 13 June 2009  Report this post
Jennifer

Very clever! A wonderful story that held me right to the end!

So Barbie finally got it! Not before time, methinks.

But poor old Eleanor.

Great writing; thanks for sharing it.

Regards

john

crowspark at 15:24 on 14 June 2009  Report this post
Great twist. That Ken is an animal.
Thanks for the read.
Bill

tusker at 06:39 on 16 June 2009  Report this post
Thanks Bill.

Jennifer


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