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Supposing I...
I suppose I know,
I suppose.
Callous fragility of toe I think I grow,
I suppose.
Blind leading the deaf leading the mime leading the hapless,
I suppose.
Helpfully prone, apt only when ceaselessly adept,
I suppose.
But buried goes prose like coke-dick nose goes,
I suppose.
Dumbfounded No’s, in time.
Knows not, chosen foes. No knots,
I supposed.
Helplessly untie me.
I propose unto thee.
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 freynolds at 08:50 on 14 September 2009
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Hi Ed,
An interesting proposal. Being set free by being tied. Some strong images here and the use of strong words to suggest them. Who is your poet friend? I assumed (perhaps wrongly) that this is the voice of a man wanting his freedom but being hopelessly slave to an addictive mistress, perhaps not of the human nature...
I'm curious to know more about it.
Fabienne
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 FelixBenson at 12:27 on 15 September 2009
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Hi Warner
Encourage your friend to join WW
There is only postive and well considered feedback here - and he/she can remain anonymous if need be.
I will be happy to give feedback to any member of the group and interested to read more of your friend's work.
Cheers, Kirsty
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Felicity F at 13:42 on 16 September 2009
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Hi.
This is a very abstract poem,and the words and phrases stand out alone by themselves, but as a poem I am not sure I am getting the meaning of it all. I see what Kirsty has said, but I confess to being confused on this one. I know that abstract is very popular these days, and maybe I am using the wrong word, and also my style is a lot more simple, whether that be a good thing or a bad thing.
It does seem to have a hopeless,almost weary tone to it though.
Felicity.
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Felicity F at 13:51 on 16 September 2009
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Ps. I meant to say in that last,that I see what Fabienne has said ( as regards meaniing)...
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purpletandem at 22:52 on 20 September 2009
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This is a difficult poem but I rather like it even though I don't really understand what it is about. I find the 'music' of the poem very pleasing and I find the subject matter mysterious and intriguing, although I do sense (maybe wrongly) that there is quite a dark side to it.
I would say that, whilst poems that hide their meaning are entirely legitimate for a writer to write, as a reader there is only so far one can go with them. It is a question of degree. Many poems of course hide something, and part of the pleasure of a poem can be teasing out some of the mystery. But many readers will want something tangible to start off with.
pt
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Arian at 18:24 on 06 October 2009
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I liked it’s sense of haplessness, Warner – the narrator being somehow out of control of his own destiny (aren’t we all.) And some great sonic highlights, especially:
But buried goes prose like coke-dick nose goes,
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Almost Thomasesque!
On another level, though, I found – like others – that I couldn't quite connect with the poet’s message. But perhaps there isn’t one – maybe it’s intended for the ear only, rather than the mind. And there’s nothing wrong with that!
Cheers
peter
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