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Pebble
Posted: 19 November 2003
Word Count: 69
Summary: Inspired by a quotation from Thomas Carlyle
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Take this pebble
for a moment
Walking with intent toward a goal
I bring it one step nearer
Every action I take is mine to make
every dream is mine to dream
Every mark on paper a gesture of freedom
every word a thought made and shared
To affirm this life
and make it happen
'...casting the pebble from my hand
the centre of gravity of the universe changes.'
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 poemsgalore at 18:28 on 19 November 2003
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I like the way you have made every verse like another step towards your goal, towards the pebble. An interesting poem, very thought provoking.
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JohnK at 21:41 on 19 November 2003
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Andrew -
In 69 words you have raised multiple ripples, not just on the surface. Much more than a pebble can, a single idea is able to alter the combined c of g of everything... Action or inaction, physical or mental, words and thoughts shared, it is all there. Congratulations, poet.
All the very best,
JohnK.
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bluesky3d at 08:31 on 20 November 2003
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Kathleen and JohnK -
Yesterday I picked up a pebble and a dimly remembered quotation came to mind as I threw it into the sea (similar to the one on chaos theory about the flapping of a butterfly's wing)- So can't claim total originality for the idea, but nevertheless that was the inspiration.
Thanks both - your comments are much appreciated.
A :o)
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 Elsie at 20:26 on 20 November 2003
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What a brilliant thought in the last stanza. Very positive, like those 'affirmations' used to bring something closer.
Elsie
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bluesky3d at 08:49 on 21 November 2003
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Elsie - Yes, it was not me who had that thought first - in my picking up the pebble I had the recollection of the quote and the rest of the affirmation came from that - not any brilliance on my part - so I've put quotation marks around the last stanza to make that clear.
Affirmations act like magic spells - they use simple images to bring wishes closer - like those mission statements businesses use they only work if the underlying concept is strong.
Andrew :o)
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Jo in france at 15:50 on 23 November 2003
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I love the mixture of the underlying sense of purpose and the spiritual quality of this poem Andrew. It's really powerful. How long did it take to write?
Jo
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 fkc at 09:36 on 29 November 2003
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I do enjoy spare verse. It's a sign of confidence not to feel the need to overwrite and to understand that words as meaning have honest beauty. I think this is a real gem.
Frances
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bluesky3d at 13:32 on 29 November 2003
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Jo, to answer your question I feel slightly embarrassed to have to admit that it took me as long to write as it took to type it – i.e. about a minute, but how long does it really take to write a poem ? – perhaps a lifetime... at least as long as one's life up to the point one writes it.
Andrew :o)
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bluesky3d at 14:08 on 29 November 2003
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Hi Frances - glad you liked the Pebble poem and respond to its honesty :o) - more than anything being true to oneself should be the essence of any poem.
Andrew :o)
ps I've read part of your Magpies and Swans and think it's great - I will comment in more detail when I have read it all.
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