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Vomit-fulls of Thought

by  Jibunnessa  ( 1352 )

Posted: 20 April 2003
Word Count: 121
Summary: I was pounced on in Peru by somebody I should have been able to trust. This is what I wrote that evening.


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I
feel
sick
and
I shudder.

Vomit-fulls of thought spew out of my eyes.

They
are
wide
open.

And yet,
even
without
the nothingness of the dark,
I see the uncleanliness before me
and tears
stream out
of every surface of my skin.

I cannot
cover
my face,
And scrub
my body.

The dirt
seeped through,
I smell
the wetness
And the lascivious tongue breathing fire.

And rip to shreds the flesh that cloaks the carcase of my thoughts.

I
am
sick!

And vomit
cloaks
the tears
that cloak
the fury
that cloaks
my eyes.

I smell
the wetness.
I smell
the lascivious tongue.

I sense
the stench before my nostrils
And the odour
across my body
And the sound
of dripping
in my ear
And the clamp
around my chest.

I
am
sick!


---Jib, Chiclayo, Peru, 27 Jul 2000




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Posted by :  davide at 10:53 on 29 April 2003
I love this. It sums up my inner self. I feel like dirt.All around me is filth and slime. There´s no way out.
Keep the faith J
Posted by :  Jibunnessa at 11:26 on 29 April 2003
This poem was really in response to something very unpleasant that had happened to me earlier that day. It represents my thoughts and feelings that evening.

Luckily, I don't feel like dirt all the time. Sorry to hear that you do. So, big hug from me.
Posted by :  Glimity at 21:43 on 03 May 2003
Hi Jibunessa

I enjoyed reading this poem even though it doesn't seem like a very happy one, and having read your comments, I'm sorry to hear that something unpleasant happened to you; although I am very pleased that you managed to get the feeling out of your system somewhat by writing this poem.

I have recently found out that writing poems has helped me to get alot of pain out of my own system.

Thanks for the read of a great poem.
regards
Jennifer
Posted by :  Jibunnessa at 00:07 on 04 May 2003
hi Jennifer,

Thanks for your enthusiastic comments. I'm glad you think it's a great poem. I originally put it up twice before and twice before had taken it off. ...had felt rather exposed!

...but I think it does sum up exactly how I was feeling.

Thanks again.


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