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Dizzy Whirlpools

by Rai15 

Posted: 22 December 2003
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Dizzy whirlpools
drag me down
my black eyes
fall asleep
hold my hand
I slip away
From you

My exile
continuation
My daughters
my sons
my transsexual offspring
awake to death
Nuclear winter

Those years
so far gone
A kiss goodbye
to walk away
left society
your master
To murder her

She dies
in my arms
you die
at my feet
all the while
I fought
To exist beyond






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roovacrag at 12:13 on 22 December 2003  Report this post
Very powerful words. Well done.You inspired me with this. xxAlice
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The Walrus at 12:37 on 22 December 2003  Report this post
I liked this Rai, although I'm not quite sure I understood it.

Like very much:
'my transsexual offspring
awake to death
Nuclear winter'

Very haunting.

The Walrus
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Fearless at 18:06 on 22 December 2003  Report this post
Rai

You seem to conjure many images, almost a montage....perhaps the various aspects of being, as they are brutalised? Whatever it was written to convey, and however each of us interpreted it, well done.

fearless
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