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MYSTERY

by martelo 

Posted: 27 December 2003
Word Count: 113


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WHAT IS LIFE BUT JUST A DREAM WHAT WE HAVE DONE, AND WHAT
WE HAVE BEEN NOT MUCH TO GO ON WHAT WE KNOW OF THE PAST
BUT CAN WE CHANGE OUR DESTINY OR WILL IT LAST.
WHO KNOWS THIS ETERNAL THING, WHY IS THIS SO- DO WE HAVE TO GO ALONG, WHO IS TO SAY AND KNOW,LIFE IS A MYSTRY THAT NO ONE IS SO BOLD TO RELEASE THE SECRETS AND TO UNFOLD.WHEN WILL WE UNDERSTAND AND BEGIN TO KNOW WHAT
WE HAVE BEEN AND WHERE WE SHALL GO- THEY SAY THERE IS NO
BEGINNING AND NO END TO LIFE WHICH IS ETERNAL, THAT GOD
GIVES AND SENDS

BY MATTHEW WILSON 28-12-2003






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Fearless at 18:10 on 29 December 2003  Report this post
Martelo

I like this, just a few anal comments:

- lose the caps
- change the structure, as it makes it harder to follow (I have a pathetically short attention span)

You could take this piece further and extend it,
as I don't think it ends with punch. Just a thought from someone who can't write to save their life!

Write on brother...

fearless

Zigeroon at 21:39 on 23 November 2004  Report this post

Thought provoking take on the vagaries of life. Somewhat ironic.

Andrew

paul53 [for I am he] at 21:28 on 21 March 2005  Report this post
A random Read find. General agreement with Fearless, but do not think that means this lacks potential. This could go somewhere with a redraft, especially if you make the ending a memorable culmination of some kind.


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