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Deep Inside

by Rai15 

Posted: 02 January 2004
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The sun set on my mind,
all those many years ago,
I took my last glimpse of that rainbow coloured sky
and pulled the duvet over my eyes.

Turn into myself to be blinded,
by wide-eyed blackness,
I don’t need you to be so alone, in the real me
that only my darkness has known.

This colourless wonder,
seeps through my fingertips,
onto these pages so I show this to myself,
myself you see in yourself.






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Fearless at 18:42 on 02 January 2004  Report this post
Rai

A slow piece, going from rainbows to shadows, day to night, and hope to despair. Remember; it's cyclical - light will forever follow darkness.

Fearless
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roovacrag at 19:14 on 02 January 2004  Report this post
You amaze me with you play with words. Someone so young has a head full of knowledge. Keep it up,no doubt we will meet one day. Think fearless thinks the same. We love your talent, the future,young with a great mind.Keep writing as you have a future in it. xxx Alice
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Rai15 at 19:27 on 02 January 2004  Report this post
Thank you both very much. I really do hope to meet you all someday, it'd be a great experience to meet the people behind the names.

Again, thank you for your ever kind words, it is always a huge encouragment.

-Rai-
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Bobo at 23:19 on 02 January 2004  Report this post
Rai - beautiful and eloquent as always. You are indeed gifted.

BoBo x
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dr_mandrill at 23:57 on 04 January 2004  Report this post
This is incredibly visual, I really like it.

Especially: ...Turn into myself to be blinded,
by wide-eyed blackness...
It made me think of the moments when I switch out various lights and everything goes black while my eyes adjust, no matter how much I strain to see.



Thanks

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Rai15 at 16:30 on 05 January 2004  Report this post
Thank you, I agree that it reminds of flicking switches and stumbling in the dark. Thank you all.

-Rai-
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