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Ode to My Moleskin Notebook
Posted: 05 January 2004
Word Count: 95
Summary: Wrote this. Read it, and thought it smacked of pomposity.
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The myriad
Of emotions
That ambush.
The ceaseless
Conflict of
Running
The gauntlet,
The flinching pain
Snagged in
The crossfire.
The headlong
Swoop through
Fiery hoops
The skipping
The dancing
And all that form part
Of this carnival
We call life.
The thrashing
And spluttering
In the briny deep
The foot-stamping
Belly-scraping
Lows,
And all that comprise
This jamboree
We call life.
And,
If I should die
I will rest
In reassurance
Of knowing
My essence
Rests in
This notebook
And those
Who care
Who dare
To read
My take,
Will know,
The quintessential
Me.
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 Fearless at 20:17 on 05 January 2004
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Walrus
I liked this. It starts out like an anthem, then ends as a homage to your lyrics and identity (at least, that's how I interpreted it). It's not pompous - it's honest (but don't we all sometimes get the two mixed up?!)
fearless
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roovacrag at 20:27 on 05 January 2004
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I can only say what woz has said. A notebook full of feelings .xxxxxxxxxxxxxxx Alice
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Tim Darwin at 22:28 on 05 January 2004
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Hmmmm, Walrus, I liked this as well, though I think I understand your concerns about pomposity--but only because I myself am a chronic sufferer!
So...anything titled an Ode does encourage a sense at least of anachronism (handmaiden of pomposity), so there is a sense here of perhaps being a tad tongue-in-cheek, and that's fine. If you're really worried, you could undercut the sentiment at the end, perhaps by speculating what it would be if the post-mortis peruser does not find the quintessential Walrus--because that peruser is an idiot consumed by amor propre? But that might take this poem into a darker place than you mean to go!
Really, I am out of my depth commenting on poetry, so discount this suggestion! But I did enjoy this--and hope for an apporpriate fate for my own journals (not moleskin bound, alas).
Best
Tim
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Bobo at 09:31 on 06 January 2004
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Walrus - I like this a lot. The rhythm is great, and I particularly liked 'the headlong swoop through fiery loops' as it captures perfectly the circus that our lives often become.
Nice work!
BoBo x
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The Walrus at 16:27 on 06 January 2004
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Thanks all for your comments.
Fearless, not sure if it's a homage to my lyrics and identity, more that I have expressed what I wanted to express. And, this, I find strangely reassuring.
Alice, yes, it is a notebook full of feelings... god forbid someone should read it before I die!!!!!!!!!
Tim, thanks, but I hardly think you are out of your depth commenting on poetry. I was very interested to read your comments. Hadn't thought of it as tongue in cheek but perhaps you're right, I mean referring to the big L as a 'carnival' or 'jamboree' doesn't really smack of someone who's taking things seriously.... Thanks again.
Bobo, glad you liked it. If life were a circus, I would be a lion tamer.
The Walrus
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