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Sonnet on Radio 4

by rmol1950 

Posted: 14 July 2012
Word Count: 102
Summary: Hi I am new to this site.This was one of the first things I wrote about 5 years ago. You need to be a BBC radio 4 listener of the older vintage to get it. Here's hoping some of you are.


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The flick of a switch or spin of a dial
quickens my slumbering solitude
and music and drama and people arrive
flood into my room, a multitude.

On an alien pulsing wave from deep space
comes the rhythm of rap or shipping report.
A voice from the past, a steeplechase,
a celebrity life dissected in court.

Then itís time to question my bedtime book
and laugh at a clever anecdote.
Fly over the pond with Alistair Cook
or thrill to that Gershwin clarinet note.

But if my radio should whistle and shriek,
I switch off, roll over, and go back to sleep.






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V`yonne at 13:51 on 14 July 2012  Report this post
Hi there Richard Nice to vada yer eke! I liked this although I am not a fan of end-rhyme but your rhymes were good.

In line two I'd leave out the word 'arrive'. People rhymes with dial better anyway.

I was disappointed by the last two lines though and I know you can do better than that! I was recently at the Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy Radio Show. Did you ever listen to that? I remember at the time I listened to stave off homesickness... It could be to induce sleep or crave company or many other reasons and I think your last two line could reflect something of the personality something of the WHY of radio as a beginning and end to the day.

rmol1950 at 22:38 on 14 July 2012  Report this post
Hi oonah
Thanks for the constructive comment.
This was written as an exercise for a course I did. The brief was to write a poem using the shakespearian sonnet format, three rhyming quatrains and a couplet, and the topic was to be something to do with the media. I did my best but clearly failed with the iambic pentameter. And as you noted, the couplet was crap. Must try harder.
I have long been a radio 4 fan. The only thing I like about this piece are the various references to radio 4 programs. Incidentally it occurs to me there are probably lots of people around now who have never heard a radio that whistles and shrieks.
Best wishes
Richard

Dave Morehouse at 03:54 on 15 July 2012  Report this post
Hello Richard. End line rhyme is hard yet you pull it off without falling into the sing-song pit. I enjoy your radio journey through the day in this piece. Incidentally, I grew up on AM radio and am familiar with whistles, shrieks and, my favorite - two stations at once. This is well done by my stateside interpretation. Thanks for that, Dave.

rmol1950 at 07:53 on 15 July 2012  Report this post
Hello Dave
Thank you. I remember listening to the BBC world service on short wave radio in the USA. Lots of pulsing static and un earthly noises.
Best wishes
Richard

V`yonne at 16:55 on 28 July 2012  Report this post
Still think those two lines at the end are weak.

rmol1950 at 14:24 on 29 July 2012  Report this post
Hi Oonah
Yes I agree and I plan to work on it soon. It has been sitting around in my notebook for ages and I am loath to drop it. Don't know why.
Best wishes
Richard


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