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Letters

by LMJT 

Posted: 22 August 2012
Word Count: 249
Summary: For this week's Flash Fiction II 'Stars' challenge. A little tangential, but they're in there!


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‘We can write,’ I said, knowing that we wouldn’t.

He turned away and stared into the distance. It was late and the sky was speckled with stars.

We were sitting on the empty beach in Poros, Greece. Music played in the background and the voices of al fresco diners – my parents among them - were carried by the light breeze.

It was summer 1993 and tomorrow I would return to England, secretly relishing the return to routine and the completion of my A levels.

‘You have make me happy,’ Alex said, then kissed me with a tenderness that I thought every man in my future would possess.

Outside my hotel, he wrote my address on the back of his hand, reading it back to me carefully.

For three months, he wrote once a week. His letters were charismatic and witty, describing families in the restaurant and snatches of overheard conversation. There were crossings out and corrections of English, a sense of writing in the moment, free from self-censorship.

In contrast, my responses were drafted in pencil, proofread and sense checked, (first allusions to my career as an editor, perhaps) then typed up in the college library.

The only time I put pen to paper was during the Christmas holidays, when my mother announced her affair with her boss and my father had his first breakdown.

Alex never wrote back.

But he called.

He called on New Year’s Eve and we talked for so long that nothing else mattered.







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Cornelia at 08:16 on 23 August 2012  Report this post
Full of feeling. Well done.

Sheila



Desormais at 12:29 on 23 August 2012  Report this post
A nice little flash that left me a tad unsatisfied and wondering. I wondered whether it was the start of something or the end of something, or an indication of the differences between them, or whether the message was that when she acted spontaneously for the first time it moved him to make a more personal form of contact. I think I'd have liked a little bit more... but that's me, I like it all tidied up. ; Enjoyed it, nevertheless.

Sandra

Margarita at 11:44 on 24 August 2012  Report this post
As for only 249 words it was a very nice piece that revealed lots of feelings. I like the beginning, when the narrator already understands that this relationship is going nowhere, but nevertheless they keep in touch. I agree with Sandra , I would like to know what happens next.

Rita

LMJT at 19:58 on 26 August 2012  Report this post
Thank you all for your comments.

I think this is a piece I'll develop a bit more, so watch this space!

Liam


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