Login   Sign Up 


In a moment of idleness

by V`yonne 

Posted: 21 April 2013
Word Count: 116
Summary: I couldn't resist

Font Size

Printable Version
Print Double spaced

God had nothing better to do that day
so he took off his crown to scratch his bonce
and had an idea a good one for once
to create a little friend out of clay
but where was he going to get any?
Clay/earth earth/clay his mind whirred merrily.
Nice name Earth and hed call his friends mankind.
Hed make two of them and give them a fork
a garden and fruit trees and let them work
the land with lots of animals to husband;
hed give them justice and freedom the prize

and as he thought, before his very eyes
the universe exploded into view.
Satan finds work for idle hands to do.

Favourite this work Favourite This Author

Comments by other Members

Nella at 07:01 on 22 April 2013  Report this post
LOL, Oonah! That's an ending that really has punch! And a sonnet to boot, in such a short time. Very, very clever.

This was an enjoyable read!


V`yonne at 12:22 on 22 April 2013  Report this post
Thanks Robin it occurred to me when I was making my comment in the thread and I just couldn't resist trying to write it.

tusker at 18:24 on 22 April 2013  Report this post
Loved it, Oonah.

Often the ones that strike a creative spot, quickly, does well. This is good fun and made me smile.


V`yonne at 18:30 on 22 April 2013  Report this post
Thanks Jen. I think that while you were over commenting on mine I was commenting on yours which is really a bit strange

crowspark at 19:40 on 22 April 2013  Report this post
Clever and enjoyable, Oonah. Hmm! Not sure about justice and freedom though. An angel with a fiery sword and free to leave, but not come back :(

V`yonne at 22:56 on 22 April 2013  Report this post
Ill thought out plan, Bill. Like government thinking you know...

Flyswat at 01:07 on 24 April 2013  Report this post
Fantastic! Clever, witty and a great read.

Dave Morehouse at 17:57 on 24 April 2013  Report this post
Heavenly creative. I especailly liked using the fork to foreshadow Satan. Idle hands indeed. Nicely done, Dave.

Artista at 22:03 on 26 April 2013  Report this post
Great Oonah, and I love the twist. Clever!

V`yonne at 23:40 on 26 April 2013  Report this post
Glad it gave you all a laugh

michwo at 11:39 on 13 January 2017  Report this post
This sort of reminded me of a limerick I once reed:
God's plan had a hopeful beginning,
But man spoiled his chances by sinning.
We hope that the story
Will end in God's glory,
But at present the other side's winning.

To post comments you need to become a member. If you are already a member, please log in .