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Compassion

by The Walrus 

Posted: 17 February 2004
Word Count: 153


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The bile of bitterness flows
as dignity departs.

Sharpen your teeth
as you select from secrets shared
the words of venom
to effect
maximum damage.

Point the barrage of
well-aimed missiles,
desecrate the memory,
trample ripshod with hob-nailed boots
of fury.

Gather your admiring army
to crucify me,
tell them your story,
make them despise me.
Assuage the pain,
restore the pride,
validate your being
and resurrect the banner
of belief.

And it is inhumane to expect
shoulders broad enough
to sustain the pain
of hatred borne of love,
and I understand,
to bury it,
you had to kill it.
Viciously.

And I hope, when you have
finally wrought your vengeance
peace will soothe your soul,
and in the darkest of some future hour,
I will still be there,
my promises holding true.

I dance along this glittering path
encrusted with exotic gems
in my gold sandled feet
with outstretched hand.

Forever Red








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Chem at 15:37 on 17 February 2004  Report this post
I like it I like it I like it!
Really want to comment more but so busy at work! Will revisit when I get home.
Good one

Em

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I am revisiting :-)
I felt so much passion in this poem and, yes, it did make me somewhat enthusiastic ;-) On reading it I felt really empowered. Good imagery and beautiful ending!

Em the Enthusiastic
:-)

The Walrus at 15:56 on 17 February 2004  Report this post
Thanks Em. Your enthusiasm is priceless!

The Walrus

roovacrag at 21:19 on 17 February 2004  Report this post
OUCH,
Bitter poem.Calm down,What army would crucify you?
I see a love thats not happening. xxAL

The Walrus at 21:32 on 17 February 2004  Report this post
Bitterness, no. Sure, there's poetic licence in here Al, but it is entitled 'Compassion' and ends with an 'outstretched hand'.

The Walrus
xx

Fearless at 21:37 on 17 February 2004  Report this post
If the hand is outstretched, I am sure it will be taken, and held for ever more.

Fearless
xx

The Walrus at 21:46 on 17 February 2004  Report this post
Itis. It will remain so. Green is the colour of my hope, a hope that never dies.

The Walrus
xx

The Walrus at 09:15 on 18 February 2004  Report this post
Thanks for revisiting Em... your comments are much appreciated.

The Walrus

miffle at 11:52 on 18 February 2004  Report this post
Walrus - a vehement, poem and a curious one too. 'Compassion' ? - I see it in the last 2 stanzas but in the first 5 (like Alice) I see a bitterness and a sting - images of betrayal, contempt, killers (snake, army), of violence, persecution and self-destruction.

'Of hatred/ Borne of love' - I find this interesting as I have always thought 'indifference' (not hate) to be the opposite of love i.e. hate and love yes, they often intertwine and you suggest this here -

I very much liked the serenity of the closing stanza in contrast to the initial 5 - Write on, nikki ;-)

The Walrus at 14:21 on 18 February 2004  Report this post
Nikki, you are absolutely right, most of the poem is vehement. However, the vehemence reflects the words and actions of the subject being written about, not of the writer, an observation of response to certain circmstances.

There is an element of betrayal, yes. But, dancing along glittering paths in gold sandals is not, for me, synonymous with self-destruction. Contempt is not shown with an outstretched hand. And after all is said and done, the last two stanzas are the real point of the poem, which I still hope earns its title.

Your considered and insightful comments Nikki, are, as always appreciated. Thanks.

The Walrus

igbit33 at 16:22 on 18 February 2004  Report this post
This is simply amazing. I have read it several times over and think I enjoy it more each time.

igbit. xx

The Walrus at 18:40 on 18 February 2004  Report this post
igbit, gosh, thank you. You are too kind.

The Walrus
xx

EmiliaDG at 17:58 on 22 February 2004  Report this post
I found this very powerful and am now going in search of more of your work. If I don't find any, please post more?

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Blimey! I found loads! I may need some time to read it all!

The Walrus at 09:11 on 23 February 2004  Report this post
Thanks for your comment Emilia. Yes, there is a reasonable amount I've posted! Any feedback, appreciated.

The Walrus

EmiliaDG at 11:18 on 24 February 2004  Report this post
Feedback on its way. Give me some time to get through your huge collection - you are prolific indeed - and I shall be back with more indepth feedback.


word`s worth at 11:57 on 24 February 2004  Report this post
I thought this a very powerful poem. About the state of the world today and true to life it only conjures up feeling of bitterness, anger, rage, despair and hopelessness. Then there is the compassionate part in italics...I sensed that perhaps you were talking about Jesus/God/a prophet of some sort and that hope was still there in the darkness. The outstretched hand...forever red - stained with blood (to my thinking). As with all poetry, the reader will make of it what he/she will and it can differ drastically to what the poet actually intended to relay. Whatever your message - I found it emotional, touching and left me feeling rather sad (but I'm like that most of the time about these things so don't worry about it!).

Great poem.

Nahed

The Walrus at 17:52 on 24 February 2004  Report this post
Thanks Emilia. Appreciated. No rush.

Nahed, was really interested to read your comments and your intepretation. Can see what you mean. Feelings/emotions can be so paradoxical.

Thanks.

The Walrus



Lawrenco at 18:01 on 01 April 2004  Report this post
This poem comes to me like a sling shot of shiny gems -it might hurt a little ,but what joy afterwards (no pain no gain!).-Pounding my soul with cultivated compassion.
O.K so its been a bad day!
Then I found this quintessential little gem..

The stanzas 4 and 5 are beatifully defiant for truth.

Stanza 6 certainly has so much,true compassion.

Overall I found it to communicate in open,inteligent,opine.

The last stanza is so classical spiritual.The colour of gold,intellectual your soul carriage.
I was a little confused by the Red: Political? Angry?Will you ever cease from mental fight ? I really hope not walrus .

If you could bottle this stuff ,you`d be putting good doctors out of work!!!



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Two bottles of gold top please!-It really has healing emote!


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