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Playground Abandoned

by The Walrus 

Posted: 20 April 2004
Word Count: 147


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Strolling alone, bucket and spade in hand,
relishing the wet sand squidging between her toes,
the little girl, chattered away happily…






Just because you chose to leave
upon the eve of maturity –
dismissing our puerile ways -
banishing the glory of halcyon days,
that’s no reason to huff and puff
and blow my house down.

And, just because you’ve acquired
a taste for Caviar,
swallowing oysters,
and scoffing Sushi,
that’s no reason to mock
my Hula-Hooped fingers
or my soldiers smeared with Marmite.

But, it is not fair to trample
my playmates’ sandcastles
built upon foundations of imagination,
adorned with exquisite shells of amazement.

And just because you choose to ignore them
it doesn’t mean they’re not there,
their existence, brushed as it is with angel dust divine,
their gossamer raiment shimmering a starlight sublime.

Anyway, their toys
are bigger and better than yours.
So there.






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Fearless at 15:28 on 20 April 2004  Report this post
Sharp, but still playful. I like the scene-setting intro...
...one can imagine a childlike voice saying all this, but it takes a fairly sinister turn, in terms of double or hidden meaning, when one imagines this with an adult voice (but what separates adult and children in terms of such reflections?). Enjoyable. Liked the off-the-cuff ending....deliciously throwaway. Write on,

Fearless
x


Paperback at 18:54 on 20 April 2004  Report this post
This was great, i loved it. But then i don't normally read (or understand) poetry so maybe this isn't such a good thing for you to hear. Although, if i were you, i'd be pretty happy to hear how great i was. Even if it is from someone like me.

Matt

The Walrus at 20:18 on 20 April 2004  Report this post
Fearless, thanks, astute comments as always.... made me think, the childlike/adult voices seem intertwined... hmmm.

Matthew, thanks, on the contrary... am honoured you read and commented on something outside your genre... Glad you liked it.

The Walrus

roovacrag at 21:51 on 21 April 2004  Report this post
lovely poem.

Takes me back years to the bucket and spade,sand between the toes,laughter.
Prefer the marmite soldiers to caviar.
Children will be children no matter what the back ground.
Something people forget.

Great poem.
xxxxxxxxxx Red daughter.
xx Alice

Chem at 20:11 on 01 September 2004  Report this post
That's what I'm talking about! Your poem says it all, it's brilliant. I very like how you set the scene at the beginning too. If I have children I want them to enjoy being children and remain innocent for as long as they can!

Thanks
Em

The Walrus at 07:02 on 02 September 2004  Report this post
Quite right too!

Thanks for looking this out and commenting.

Bob




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