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by roovacrag 

Posted: 26 April 2004
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Rain came
lightning same
1 2 3

4 Thunder

Still the rain came
a storm
pull plugs out.

trees going,
who cares
you're not going.

2 3......thunder
two miles away
what next?

it's here,
some to the cellars

Trees topped,
roads blocked,
no electricity
all blanked.

Just a night
of a storm
all nothing
just a storm.

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bjlangley at 15:11 on 27 April 2004  Report this post
I sleep through storms. I was on holiday with a bunch of friends once, in a tiny chalet, there was a big storm, the whole place rocked, and I just kept on snoring.

I love the counting in this, because it's something we all do. There seems to be a panic about it too, and in the last line when you write "just a storm" I don't believe it. I think it's as if you're trying to tell yourself it's just a storm, nothing to worry about - and that's why I like it.

All the best,


joanie at 15:44 on 27 April 2004  Report this post
Alice, this made me think of storms when I was a child - my Dad used to take me to the window to watch so that they were exciting rather than frightening. Counting helps; I liked the counting at the beginning and picked up later. Such devastation, then after it has all died down, nothing at all - it was nothing. I thought of 'full of sound and fury, signifying nothing' - I don't whether that's what you thought too?
I liked it.

Bee at 15:50 on 27 April 2004  Report this post
Alice, I really enjoyed this - egged on my memory of storms in Durban...afternoon storms after a hot humid day. I used to be petrified of them, and now being a way I miss them - the fear of using a phone, your tv going off, darkness and scurrying for candles. Well done, this is great!


roovacrag at 19:35 on 27 April 2004  Report this post
Thank you all for your comments.
Wrote this as the storm was at its peak and i had pulled all the plugs out.
Ben if i had been asleep i would not have woken up.
xx Alice

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