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JUST A STORM
Posted: 26 April 2004
Word Count: 63
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Rain came
lightning same
1 2 3
4 Thunder
ok.
Still the rain came
a storm
flooding
pull plugs out.
Crash...
trees going,
who cares
you're not going.
Lightning
2 3......thunder
two miles away
what next?
lightning,
1..crash,bang
it's here,
some to the cellars
Trees topped,
roads blocked,
no electricity
all blanked.
Just a night
of a storm
all nothing
just a storm.
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 bjlangley at 15:11 on 27 April 2004
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I sleep through storms. I was on holiday with a bunch of friends once, in a tiny chalet, there was a big storm, the whole place rocked, and I just kept on snoring.
I love the counting in this, because it's something we all do. There seems to be a panic about it too, and in the last line when you write "just a storm" I don't believe it. I think it's as if you're trying to tell yourself it's just a storm, nothing to worry about - and that's why I like it.
All the best,
Ben
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 joanie at 15:44 on 27 April 2004
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Alice, this made me think of storms when I was a child - my Dad used to take me to the window to watch so that they were exciting rather than frightening. Counting helps; I liked the counting at the beginning and picked up later. Such devastation, then after it has all died down, nothing at all - it was nothing. I thought of 'full of sound and fury, signifying nothing' - I don't whether that's what you thought too?
I liked it.
joanie
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Bee at 15:50 on 27 April 2004
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Alice, I really enjoyed this - egged on my memory of storms in Durban...afternoon storms after a hot humid day. I used to be petrified of them, and now being a way I miss them - the fear of using a phone, your tv going off, darkness and scurrying for candles. Well done, this is great!
Bee
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roovacrag at 19:35 on 27 April 2004
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Thank you all for your comments.
Wrote this as the storm was at its peak and i had pulled all the plugs out.
Ben if i had been asleep i would not have woken up.
xx Alice
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