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My Turn

by Rai15 

Posted: 28 April 2004
Word Count: 87


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heavy
breathing
anger
growling
fists
shaking
teeth
grinding -
screaming
smashing
yelling
crying,
punching
kicking
throwing
lying,
raging
shouting
twisting
dying,
fallen
down and
you don’t
under-
stand
everything
I
am
everything
you
made
nothing
in
between
nothing
to stand
on
no
common
ground
each
time
I try
it never
works
why can’t
you
listen to
me
really
listen to
me
too much
repression
too much
building up
it’s just
too much
I have
feelings
but they
won’t change
for you
not this time
not anymore.
No.






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roovacrag at 20:44 on 28 April 2004  Report this post
Rai....

So much anger here.

I saw this when i worked with people with a learning disability.
Not easy.

Take it easy my friend.
You have so much going for you.
Best to take your anger out in poetry.
xxxxxxx Alice

joanie at 09:39 on 29 April 2004  Report this post
I really like the format of this - I can hear the anger and the way the speaker just has to get it out and won't stop until it's been said. I like the final word. I can picture him/her walking away with great determination, never looking back. Good - I liked it.
joanie

Rai15 at 15:48 on 29 April 2004  Report this post
Thank you both very much, joanie, as I was writing this all I could think of was just having "No." right at the very end, so glad you liked it.
Thanks again,

-rai-

poemsgalore at 19:28 on 29 April 2004  Report this post
Very good Rai, I too liked the format as it's like being led along a path which hopefully leads to you feeling better after letting out all the anger and frustration inside.


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