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Destiny or Weakness...?
Posted: 01 June 2004
Word Count: 61
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You made me do it -
I had no say,
words would not be uttered,
each letter choked by your kiss.
I had to do it -
you gave no choice,
no escape route from insanity,
each breath channeled through your lips.
The dance was choreographed
long long before we met -
the steps mapped out
in one of fate's honey-traps.
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 Fearless at 17:55 on 01 June 2004
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A lyric that reminds me how stories, expressions can dance across a wizened face. Liked it.
Fearless
<Added>
I guess these comments are irrelevant, as you changed the poem totally (it's not longer 'old blue eyes')!
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roovacrag at 05:33 on 02 June 2004
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Good title and very apt to the piece.
So true of life.
Well done.
xx Alice
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Bobo at 10:30 on 02 June 2004
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Woz - yeah, sorry...decided I wasn't at all happy with the original poem so overwrote it with this. Al, thanks for your comments - this was a poem which wrote itself - must have been bubbling up for quite some time - about a past 'romance' gone wrong - it certainly felt like kismet at the time, but perhaps not...?!
Lisa x
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Lottie at 10:52 on 05 July 2004
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Hello
Sorry so long to reply, slowly gowing through writewords.
I read this poem before reading others comments and your own added comment about this being about *a past romance, gone wrong*.
You made me do it -
I had no say,
words would not be uttered,
each letter choked by your kiss. |
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Reading this and the whole piece to me sounds like the speaker is saying they didn't want this romance to happen, the speaker had no say in this romance - it sounds like a very one sided romance to me.
At first when reading I thought it was about *not being able to say NO* perhaps even of *abuse*, but that is how I interpreted it. Forgive me if I'm wrong.
I think it is a very well written piece, and quite thanks for posting (and rewriting)!!
Lottie :-)
Lottie
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