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HAPPYBIRTHDAY

by roovacrag 

Posted: 10 June 2004
Word Count: 98
Summary: Happy birthday Anthony.xxxxxxxxx


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Happy birthday to you,
today you reached two,
not sure you will make three,
if you climb up that tree.

You smile and you grin,
which isn't a sin,
cheeky face and a giggle
lets nannan know that you win.

Is it because
you remind me of the source,
that brought you up
and entered our world.

Just like your Dad,
he is never sad,
loved by all of his friends.

Yet I despaired
nothing compared
to the ease that he takes in his stride.

Takes life as it comes,
treated the same,
as his son
does now.






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Nell at 08:40 on 11 June 2004  Report this post
Alice, there seems to be an undercurrent in this poem, perhaps it's the use of the past tense when speaking about the little one's father, or perhaps you're speaking of when he was a child too. Happiness is such a fleeting emotion, always it seems to me, tinged with sadness in the knowledge of its transitory nature.

Nell.

The Walrus at 09:30 on 11 June 2004  Report this post
Like the contrast between the first and second half of this poem - the sort of cheeky happy-go-lucky beginning and then looking further back to 'source' - in a very adult way - interesting combination.

Do keep copy for Anthony - I'm sure he will treasure it when he's older.

Red
xxx

miffle at 10:58 on 11 June 2004  Report this post
Alice, Love the first verse especially: love and care and the adventurous spirit of a little boy shine through ;-)

Last four verses: I think these give the sense of a tinge of sadness - as Nell suggests... I think that your use of the past tense contributes to this.

All the best, Nikki xx

roovacrag at 11:31 on 11 June 2004  Report this post
Like father,like son. Anthony is just like his daddy when he was a child. So i know he will grow up with the same sense of humour.

Heaven help me when that day comes. 2 from the same mould..
xx Alice

Lawrenco at 23:54 on 16 June 2004  Report this post
Nice one Alice,recognised the northern accent, common sense somehow in it .

gard at 01:08 on 17 June 2004  Report this post
nice piece Alice!


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