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NONESENSE(reworked)
Posted: 05 July 2004
Word Count: 131
Summary: Reworked this with the help of my friend David Holmes.
Thank you David.
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Head full of rainbows
heart full of worms,
frogs in my memory
that just squirm and squirm.
moonbeams fill my pocket
leg with just wood rot.
Kettle full of smells
Lady Grey it's not.
stick to my cucumber,
sweets all around
explosive noise fills the air
but makes not a sound.
Add a tinge of leprechaun
and a touch of radish sauce
plus a pinch of sod all
that is the tore de force
loads and loads of grotesque stuff
thats blowing in the wind.
Add all the other stuff
that Ainsley Harriot binned.
Aroma is just perfect
stewing in the pot
stop giving grampa sprouts
or h'ell blow away the lot.
Life is just nonesense
so laugh at the world.
What have we got to lose?
nothing but our nerve.
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 Rai15 at 17:44 on 05 July 2004
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I must say that I really like this! And it came at just the right time, it has cheered me up. Well done,
-Rai-
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olebut at 18:39 on 05 July 2004
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Alice
I love the sentiment and the humour with this poem but for some reason it doesn't quite work for me perhaps it is because subconscioulsy I think that nonsense poems should have a simple rhyme to them.
equally you have some great phrases so I guess it is just me
take care my friend
david x
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miffle at 20:08 on 05 July 2004
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Alice, a higgeldy-piggeldy giggly poem with a spritely feel... Good fun! Love nikki xx
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roovacrag at 21:09 on 05 July 2004
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Rai,David,Nikki.
Thank you for you comments. Not my usual style of poetry.
David .Yes it should rhyme better.
Just a fun poem.
xx Alice
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 joanie at 15:15 on 06 July 2004
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Alice, I enjoyed this version much more!! 'laugh at the world'! - yes, absolutely!
joanie
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roovacrag at 15:22 on 06 July 2004
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Joan many thanks. I agree it is a lot better. Good to have friends on writewords that tell you where you have gone wrong.
xx Alice
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olebut at 18:31 on 06 July 2004
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alice
thank you for the compliment but I think all I did was provide the catalyst you provided the words and the inspiration ( wonder if the ref to Lady Grey will work ( HA)
take care and I think your poem will now work very well in a book of poetry for children.
david xx
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gard at 01:06 on 07 July 2004
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Hi Roova
yes a higgeldy piggeldy wiggley poem!
I did not see the first version, was it more serious?
very much like
Head full of rainbows
heart full of worms,
frogs in my memory
that just squirm and squirm. |
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did you mean it to be nonesense instead of nonsense? Just curious?
G
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roovacrag at 06:50 on 07 July 2004
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Gard thank you for your comments. Yes it is supposed to be nonesense. I deal for children.
xx Alice
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roovacrag at 18:39 on 07 July 2004
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Ticonderoga.
Glad I perked up your day.
I aim to please.
Laugh at the world and it laughs back.
xx Alice
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Lawrenco at 06:10 on 08 July 2004
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Do you ever remember Catweazle ;well it sounded a bit like one of his recipe ,if thats the case I will certainly go on a diet good old fashioned nonsense.A good laugh.
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roovacrag at 06:58 on 08 July 2004
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Lawrenco.. Yes i do remember catweazle.I never thought it until you pointed it out. It does sound like one of his recipes.
xx Alice
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