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Turbulent being
Posted: 10 July 2004
Word Count: 51
Summary: About a guy I work with. Paradoxical and beguiling.
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Amorphous soul
splintered by expectation
and the need to repel.
Your urge to rebel is deafening -
a knee-jerk of panicked hysteria
assimilated as defiance.
Self-denigration is spun -
doctored to become
the chiding mask of resentment.
No contentment is sought
as kick-in-the-gut assault
engenders more feeling.
I feel your hatred
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 miffle at 15:11 on 11 July 2004
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Bobo, hello there... I found this a 'spitty' poem in emotion and sound: perhaps it's all the 'sp' 't' sounds that thread through it... Which seems apt for a 'hatred' poem. I like the way that 'being' holds a double meaning here. Regards, Miffle
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Bobo at 16:15 on 11 July 2004
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Nicola - yes, definitely 'spitty' - that's kind of what the person I was writing about is like - so I'm glad it came across like that.
BoBo ;0)
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Kipper at 18:09 on 11 July 2004
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Spitty yes. Spitful even. Beautifully bitter Bobo.
Feel inclined to be devil's advocate - perhaps the chap needs a Big Hug, after all it's not much fun working in a frilly thong (sorry, sorry, that was a different conversation!)
Not sure about amorphous/splintered, could be oxymoronic, but Hey it sounds good. You hint at some possible positives in his character, or at least reasons - failed [i[expectation (in life generally?). Repelling and self-denigrating out of insecurity?
No you're right, he's a pillock.
Regards, Kipper.
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Bobo at 18:28 on 11 July 2004
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Kipper - thanks for commenting. I agree - he probably does need a big hug, but at the same time he needs an even bigger kick somewhere painful! Yes, the oxymoron was intentional - I thought it was in keeping with the guy's paradoxical 'personality'.
Cheers
BoBo x
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Sazmac at 18:14 on 14 July 2004
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Great picture, and made me think about my dear colleagues...
Thank you,
Saz
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