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History repeats itself

by Bobo 

Posted: 26 July 2004
Word Count: 46


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It came to me in a dream -
vipers snared,
fearsome and loathing
with venom
from the haunting
of your eyes.

This, our dilemma -
fight or flee,
no easy navigation
for this possible reprise.
The answer rides on the air,
crying the tears of others.






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The Walrus at 21:25 on 27 July 2004  Report this post
Strange piece this one Bobo, intense and minimalistic, can almost capture its essence but not quite.

Glad you're back (albeit I'm a bit absent).

The Walrus

itcametomeinadream at 10:03 on 28 July 2004  Report this post
I really liked the animalistic tone of this piece. Intense emotions can often be instinctual and your words are as powerful and haunting as strong feelings can be.

Bobo at 11:28 on 28 July 2004  Report this post
itcametome... - Passion is very animalistic by nature, so I'm glad that came across. Intense emotions are the ultimate double-edged sword, and rarely come tidily packaged!

Walrus - good to hear from you gal! Glad you 'liked' it - I guess maybe it doesn't stand alone very well as a piece, but rather was in reply to another poem - maybe I'll revisit it later!

BoBo :)

Account Closed at 11:33 on 28 July 2004  Report this post
Hi Bobo,

Fascinating poem, with some very strong visual elements.
I like the wordplay with 'vipers' and 'venom', sharp and powerful.
'Crying the tears of others' is the kind of line that stays with readers.

Ste


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