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Lost and Found

by The Walrus 

Posted: 01 August 2004
Word Count: 120


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I barred the steel bars
of my solid door,
leaving her
to freeze her arse
upon the coldness
of my doorstep.

I muffled her cries
with the expanding foam
of my ear plugs
while I strayed
into the playground of ghouls.

And from my house of horror
I finally emerged -
blood solidifying
upon my hands -
congealing in my heart.

And years of estrangement
left you seemingly ragged
but still you were there,
patiently sitting there,
your translucent fingers
clasping the bandages
to dress the self-inflicted wounds.

And while you lifted your wasting arm
and placed my head
upon your bony breast,
I heard the strength of your heartbeat
and I swore, never again,
to forsake you, my friend.






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Fearless at 21:56 on 01 August 2004  Report this post
Red

Quite a departure. A story in verse, with your trademark imagery, but a welcome, darker tinge. A very fine piece.

Write on, Fearless x

roovacrag at 22:05 on 01 August 2004  Report this post
Red a great piece. Loved the first stanza. Pure magic with words.
xx Stan

The Walrus at 22:36 on 01 August 2004  Report this post
Yup Fearless, seem to be wading the treacled waters of dark poetry. It's quite fascinating actually. Glad it works for you.

Thanks Stan, too kind.

Red
xx

miffle at 01:37 on 02 August 2004  Report this post
I like the image of the street urchin sitting on the doorstep faithful loyal though the door is barred: resilient both.

<Added>

on a visual note perhaps I'd experiment with a break in the long stanza at the end: perhaps a break with the turn of ideas after 'wounds'... (?)

The Walrus at 20:26 on 02 August 2004  Report this post
Thanks Miffle. Think you're right, as usual;-) Have edited accordingly.

The Walrus

Bobo at 23:49 on 02 August 2004  Report this post
Walrus - strong imagery casting dark shadows. Good piece.

BoBo x

The Walrus at 17:35 on 03 August 2004  Report this post
Thanks Bobo.

The Walrus
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